Bad Player Good Player

i took out the bad player since i feel the good player is better

good player

they warn me not to love you
they tell me you’re a player
and honestly thas one of the most
adorable things about you
cuz I kno you’re not..
you abandon life’s problems
in the company of a man
and it’s usually the man in you
that excites you the most
given the moment
you’re free like a bird
till your broken nest you return
to the brokenness of your home
how can somebody who keeps so much company
feel so alone
you and I both know that situation will be alright..
but I remember wakin up in the night
and you asked me
why I liked someone so ugly
it’s the humbleness you rarely exhibit
that draws me- and all these men (lol)
it takes someone who’s known you for years
to write something like this
I know you don’t feel it right now
but you are appreciated
I remember a quote that goes
maybe some women aren’t meant to be tamed
maybe they just need to run free
till they find someone just as wild
to run with them
so when your body gets tired
dawn turns into night
your soles ache in your shoes
call on me
I"’m ready to be loosed"

its two poems in one,kind of a two sides of emotion deal

the second one is nice man, the first was a little sloppy in places and almost made me not bother with part two but I'm glad I did. really felt it, good stuff.

the first piece was jerky and bad to read, the second piece just exposed some really nice thoughts and feelings about someone who sounds like a top chick.

are they both about the same gal? i got the impression that they were but I guess I could easily be wrong.

bump bump bump

This is by far a favorite of mine, I felt very connected to this poem for reasons of my
own, it really gets into some deep shit without exposing to much, great job, I def look forward to seeing more of your work!!!

This was alright, felt rushed in a way. I liked the metas though, you made the reader think and that's something I enjoy. You shouldn't have taken out the second part in my opinion but it's whatever you think works, I suppose.

Overall, it was okay. Elevating is always something to do...and work on. So keep that in mind..and good luck. Good read.