...Lyrical Experiment...

im jus fuck about with this...straight off the head...letme know what it is...

Aiight… letme get my swag in swing in this off tha dome shit
Yea right...Lyricist to tha death kid, im so on my grown shit

…Stay real stay true and see tha day through
Buh always remember 80percent of shit spoke from these hoes jus aint true

That’s why when shit hits the fan…everybody gotta get washed up
But bringin shit to this man? And anybody can to get fucked up

^^ Fuck That!!!

Fuck luck, i got Depth In My Bars and u can See Its Deep
From the Speech Forming Art...to the Means I Preach
Drawing Scenes In The Park to The Meanest Streets
Causing Me Gettin Sparked to the Greenest Weed
This aint no Reach For The Stars Shit Its Feel The Breeze, Bitch
MC-ING IS MY HEART...ssh...can you fuckin FEEL IT BEAT??!!! Shit
I know you can, like BJ Penn hands, i throw then land
Spit grenade scripts, one hits...explodes...then BAM!!!!
Fuck it, my bad, i plead guilty to all acts off illing...
But im never ever sorry for showin u suckaz what the fuck rappin ill is!!

(fuck this)

Three five seven flows…I miss the four and six
C, even my flaws are sick, your all for my spit cuz your thoughts are bitch

To desired to line swallow Shit i'd be fine to find my minds hallow
It’d ironically show the toggle to why my rhymes mind boggle,

With sentence spewed with plentiful senseless views per section
But the sense improves per second…..............................
..........................So right now i guess im jus done brewing perfection...

^^ You Gotta Love That lol

Pretty tight dude, gotta say I liked it.

This was some standout shit for me
vvv

"Fuck luck, i got Depth In My Bars and u can See Its Deep
From the Speech Forming Art...to the Means I Preach
Drawing Scenes In The Park to The Meanest Streets
Causing Me Gettin Sparked to the Greenest Weed"

Rhyming was on, flow was nice. Could've been a bit more complex, it was simple and to the point, but the vocab was mediocre. Liked the use of multis in this was though, n yea the last bar was dope. 9/10 stay up

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Fuck luck, i got Depth In My Bars and u can See Its Deep
From the Speech Forming Art...to the Means I Preach
Drawing Scenes In The Park to The Meanest Streets
Causing Me Gettin Sparked to the Greenest Weed

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word, this was the highlight of your whole verse in my opinion just cause people can relate

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With sentence spewed with plentiful senseless views per section
But the sense improves per second…..............................
..........................So right now i guess im jus done brewing perfection...

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sicknesss, liked the closing

those were the highlights for me, nothing else really stood out as much and were decent. overall though the whole thing would be above average fam keep it up

word...appreciate tha feed from both you dudes, gud lookin out...

uppin

bump

lol...man i actually took seriously what you said about my verse until i read this.....thanks for the crit ....

lmao so u check quick key i drop?... which was still better than your drop?? rofl ok my dude, told u its not a hate thing i was just being real, buh i c we dont share tha same traits...

stay up son #1