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Imagery
thats what it is, imagery, there is no specific topic its just supposed to put pictures in your head
the fall of the chruch is upon us...Satan will reign...
delivering evel mercenaries to earth bringing us pain...
he will enter our brains...ruling us with great force...
killing all loveing hope and leaving a corpse...
divorce from the heavens...splitting from religion...
human beings led by the devil...givng them deliverence...
all benevollence crushed...all life is destroyed...
like soldiers in the army dieing before being deployed...
men running...trying to avoid the heat that arrives...
but burning in flames...the bodies no longer alive...
sleep deprived children...watching through bloodshot eyes...
watching devastation occur...unbearable to describe...
strong vibes going through the radio...but without voices...
only hearing screams caused by choices and horrble noises...
wired explosives...ticking away waiting to blow...
unable to decypher the code and watching it explode...
planes falling from the sky...ships sinking in the water...
the status of the apparatus above us is getting hotter...
slaughter towards the masses...broken glasses on the sun...
trampled on by many...and yet broken by one...
unable to see th surroundings...illitorate to fun...
gunned down by ignorance...but killed by love...
imagery depicted...my mind's eye creativity gifted...
shifting its target to your souls's spirit uplifting...
life's not scripted...can you see the pictcha...
encryptd in this verse...or did it miss ya...
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:like living life for the worst..........................
thats all, i was also focusing on vocab, an i did put emotion into it, itsmay not be considered emotional, but i tried to put emotion into the sayings and phrases i put in it, i also tried a little focus on the flow
a few explinations...
the main purpose of this, s the point that religion is falling apart, and when it says that slaughter towards the masses, its sayin that less people are ppraying, and mor epeope are dieing, doesnt it seem that way to yo you?
another thing, when it says broken glasses on the sun, this is saying, that when you look at life hard, it burns you, the way things are run and everything, when you look at it hard, the truth comes forward and it can break you and burn you, hence "broken glasses on the sun.
"trampled on by many...broken by one"
this shows how millions of people can stomp on you and force you to do things, but the only person that can change your life is you. this also plays along with the broken glasses line, millions can try and brake your view on life, but your the only one that can change it
gunned down by ignorance...but killed by love
this shows how ignorance can ruin your life, but love can kill your soul. look at it this way ok. ignorance is a poisen right, and this poisen can run through your veins and cause you to think differently and go insane and vcan even be lethal. but love, it doesnt kill you yourself, it kills your soul, cause once you r in love, your controlled by it, and you pretty much sell your soul to protecting to thing you love, and that could even mean killing your soul.
thats all im gonig to explain right now, but do you see what im saying, read inbetween the lines,
leave links and ill get back at ya
2nd part
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...6&page=2&pp=15
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=127174
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126850
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uppin, people told me this is good but i want to hear it from you guys, uppin
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props on this piece
u show some good vocab and rhymin skills in this
gd imagery used.............shit worked for me
keep elevatin man..........youve done well with this piece
peace
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thanx, finally someone, it seems that every1 trie to ignore me
uppin
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Dope man.
Lol.. It lives up to its name.
It projected alot of imagery, as well as flowing well, with good vocab throughout.
As you say, it does put pictures in your head, as I kinda pictured a comic book, post apocalyptic scenario as I progressed.
Nice metas and overall use of the main 'things' used in Om's, that basically all camee together into the piece nicely.
Each line had meaning etc..
Overall.. real tight man.
Props.
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haha, YES finally a good OM, thanx for the feedback man, much preciated, i left feedback ina lot of OM
peace
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uppin for feedback please
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wow 64 views and two replies, this is bullshit, i left about 10 ormore replies in pople's om's and they dont retun the favor,
i left feedback for
Madman- A Hole In my heart
Da Nfamous- Changing my Style
Sludge- Ms. Walker
Edicius- Day and Night
Aines- Torn Apart
SMZ & W1cked- Code of Geneva
and a few others, if you already gave feedback on my other pieces then thanx, but if not, hit this up, or leave a link and ill get at yours
peace
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Ok, believe it or not, you did what you said you wouldn't, you had a topic. But that didn't deter you from your original goal of having a shit load of imagery. Flow was iffy, and I didn't catch all your rhyme scheme, but if your only goal was to put images in my head, you did a magnificent job. I kinda got the LOTR eye thing from the devil, and Mt. Doom and shit. It was pretty sick. Good job.
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thankyou, yah know that i look i guess it did kindof have a topic
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**props are given**
i culdnt choose 2 pick which was better...your first piece...or second..they were both miraculous..u had high source of vocabulary...nice rhyme scheme...and it really got pictures into my head...very nice imagery...n word 2 madman..u did have a topic....lol..but it waz very unique...good shit...
ur a topical head ;)
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thankyo very much, very preciated
you know wut funny about this, i never seen n-demiks oter om, and but people are leaving the same type of feedback they gave himin both of my imagery and imagery pt 2, not sayin his piece was bad, it was brilliant, but im not getting as much feedback becasue of myname, interesting, but hey, what can i do
peace
leave links people
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dope open. this was a nice read. the flow was simple and to the point. the consistency of the transitions went smoothly. the best thing about this would have to be the imagery though. the whole picture was painted. lovely vocab too. religion is sort of a played topic, but you had a little twist to yours. kept me reading.
nice drop homie.
peace
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thankoyu, if only the mods thought so :huh:
peace
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dope piece man i like wot i see here and madman pretty much summed it up you created a dope picture in ma head and vocab was good flow was iffy but it aint all bout flow overall nice shit man keep pluggin away at it