How Can You Not Call It Love Ft. Lyric

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117056
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117437
How Can You Not Call This Love?
Ft. Lyric

[Hook]
My Soul Recedes, Scared Of Comitment
But I'd Risk It All For You And Stay Consistant
A Problem?? Shorty Im Way To Deep Not To Fix It
My Heart And Soul Looking Up To You.. Above
Ya Pearly Whites.. Lookin Like Fluttering Doves
Only Cowards With No Hearts Diss This Stuff
How Can You Call What I Feel For You Not Love?

Lyric
I see you around campus, tryin ta jus make eye contact
You dun seem to notice me, guess we forbidden to interact
I think I know your name...jus from hearing your friends talking
Tina...the name jus gives me chills, aint tryin ta be stalkin
I think I must be in love...Yet we've never ever even spoken
Is the feeling mutual? Dunno but thats the one thing I'm hopin
Honestly I jus wanna talk to you...fuck it I wanna kiss
But you ignore me every day...we will never coexist
So I'll keep this to myself...you'll jus be another random girl
Supress my emotions...and try to keep my feelings unfurled
So goodbye for now...to the love I never got to really love
Always regret no having courage...Cause I know you are the one

[Hook]
My Soul Recedes, Scared Of Comitment
But I'd Risk It All For You And Stay Consistant
A Problem?? Shorty Im Way To Deep Not To Fix It
My Heart And Soul Looking Up To You.. Above
Ya Pearly Whites.. Lookin Like Fluttering Doves
Only Cowards With No Hearts Diss This Stuff
How Can You Call What I Feel For You Not Love?

Diverged
You Still Look Past Me Just Like I Aint Made For You
Trust Me Shorty I Really Like You More Then I Say I Do
I've Did Everything To Coexist See I Have Paid My Dues
The Way Ya Eyes Gaze On Mine Makes Me Stay By You
Am I Okay By You? See Look I Wont Fight Or Say Lies Too
I'll Delight You How Could Neone Be The Same Like You
Into The Daylight Boo Could Anyone Be Less Phased By You
My Eyes Stuck On You And I Cant Help It They Stay Like Glue
Men Are Dazed By You? Alright I'll Fight Just To Lay By You
Im Amazed By You And There Isn't A Way I'll Play Like Fools
And Really There Isn't A Way You Could Juss Be Praised By Few
You See Me? Yep.. Im Just Stumped.. Hmm At Bay By Moods
You Trembling With Pleasure Even When You Taste My Foods
The Thing Is Only You Could Ever Even Change My Views
I'm So Enlighted By This I Would Never Be Enraged By You
I'll Simply Erase My Clues So Lets Just Encase These Fueds
Your Life Is Hard? Then I'll Quit.. Just To Make Mine To

[Hook]
My Soul Recedes, Scared Of Comitment
But I'd Risk It All For You And Stay Consistant
A Problem?? Shorty Im Way To Deep Not To Fix It
My Heart And Soul Looking Up To You.. Above
Ya Pearly Whites.. Lookin Like Fluttering Doves
Only Cowards With No Hearts Diss This Stuff
How Can You Call What I Feel For You Not Love?

yo,dog
real emotional peice
I got into the feeling
it flowed very well
and it will prolly shine better as an audio
anyway
Diverged came better than what I thought he would
it seems he's a better O.M.'er than a battler;)
the hook was okay
it had some good lines in it
as so did this O.M.
props on it
oh yeah
blahblah blah
vocab was a tad above average
and blah blah blah
I want to see more of you guys work..

lyric i think this wasn't bad for your first open mic....you wanna try to create imagery...it takes alot of descriptive words......so like....does she feel the same i wanna know or whatever ...you gotta flower it up a bit so to speak...be like the flame burns within me ....yet the rain will come if you don't feel the same....so relate to me your desire...I know not if i can take the pain...i onno that was just quick but you get what i mean ...its really hard to use vernacular like everyday words and write a dope piece...doable but hard..... Diverged can tell you done this.....a couple times at least..you had a little more imagery but really you both kind of took a respectable yet predictable angle on this read ...try to be more abstract...think deep .....you wanna go deep as possible without losing your aim.....nice piece guys 7/10

thanks guys....up

Emotions run deep in this piece no doubt Begining to endin it didnt made me fall off it was on point nicely done like the 1st person said try it on audio it would be dope the hook was aight vocab was nice Diverge was nice....he fell off at times but lyric impressive shit man...i will read more of you guys piece....

good work.

Lyric

dis was okay to me.... vocab coulda been betta but still i got da idea
flow was okay.....pretty good overall

Diverged

your flow was flawless well structured...
nice use of vocab...good internal structure and multis
im not really fond of dis whole topic but u two made it okay


i rate dis 7/10 good drop

uppin this

Hello

Lyric=Cool

This was a decent collab...Both of you had some good imagery in this piece.
I thought the hook was real cool....that's all folks~~~

thanks^ lol up

uppinj thiz bitch... lalalala

Wtf?

uppin again.. this is old..

dope.....
once i sorted out the structure it flowed real well
lyric came real hard
acually u both did
real emotional
<===impressed
keep it up
8/10
hit up my open mic in my sig please