Rule ..Don't Quit..

People Persue Dreams For There Pleasure
To Succeed By Any Distance Of Measure
Helping There Hearts Grow Healthy & Strong
Learning Right From Wrong To Go Where They Belong
Lifes A Song & You Create The Melody & Vibe
While You're Alive Take Steps With Huge Strides
Even When Failure Is Lurking About..
& You Want To Give Up To The Drought
Think About What You'd Have If You Stuck It Out
Dreams Purpose To You With Surrounding Love
It's Up To You To Answer Yes Or No Because
Only you Can Choose The Road Travelled With Sweat
Everybodys Bound To Death..It's A Hex..So..
Fight Your Cause Until Nothings Left
Quiters Never Win, Winners Never Quit
You Can Over Come Obstacles Miracles Exist
Even If In The Mist..Squeeze Your Fist
& Use Your Determination As A Key
..To Where You Want To Be Setting Your Spirite Free
Have Your Soul Bounce Out Of Your Body
Don't Quit..That Is Living Life Properly

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nice, the vocab was good and the flow kept goin. you may wanna come harder and become tougher with the lyrics.nice job and good structure. youll move up soon.

^^Read through the lines next time you read a piece

i thought this had real meaning behind it... not too played out either.... nice and smooth in your transitions, good flow... maybe one or two lines could have had another couple of syllables in, but yeah i liked this... good work on it.... like i said the actual concept and meaning was tight... props... maybe you could have made it a bit longer, but you seemed to get what you wanted to say in there.. so , i dunno....

... hit mine im jus about to post up....

Simplicity.That's the first thing that popped up in my head.
I like the inner meaning in this piece.
Once again it was very easy and simple to understand.
I have never read anything from you before so I really can't say much about your style from just this one piece.But,I can see that you have a very good writers voice.
From this piece[Once again I really can't comment on your style] I really enjoyed the simplicity inside the depth.Good work.
Peace.

Boo```ya```

^^Thanks

Upping

This was nice. Flow was very smoth. The meaning and emotion was good. The likes about taking huge strides even if you see defeat were dope.

"Quiters Never Win, Winners Never Quit
You Can Over Come Obstacles Miracles Exist" -My favorite lines.

This was pretty nice. Keep up the good work.

Wow..I Really Liked This Piece Man...Its Been Awhile Since I Read Something From You And Im Glad I Read This Piece...Inspirational....It Had A Very Deep Meaning...I Usually Tend To Think That I Cant Acheive Certain Things A Lot And This Touched Me In A Way, You Know? Everything Seemed Perfect In My Eyes...I Loved Everything In This...Great Work Man.