A tight Freestyle

I shoot down paparazzi's and Nazi's like a kamikaze;
Feelin tipsy when grenades drop and roll like yahtzee;
I go undercover and takeover like a trojan condom;
I go at people at random and knock before they come;
Even my dick likes to cum and shoot as it ejaculates;
Haters are shot down fast that it determines their fate;
I chop through bitches cause I am like a helicopter;
Thats cause my rhymes are harder than jawbreakers;
My beats stand out so well it's obvious at disc makers;
Im dangerous I have no protection cause im a risk taker;
My rhymes increase the heart rate just like a pacemaker;
My rhymes are a lot more dangerous than an assasin;
What I speak comes from my soul is my own passion;
My will robs people like it is money comin out of cashiers;
Creatin more fear among those in my sight creatin tears;
I take down opponents like embassies by many enemies;
The force of power is of course stingin like the killa bees;
Millions of years from now this tight piece will be historic;
Cause everybody wil know how ya got ya ass kicked;


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truthfully i hope it took u like 5 minutes to write dis cuz is wasnt dat great...i dont know maybe i need to hear it but reading it like i did wasnt good...not trying to diss yo shit but only tellin da truth...truth=elevation...peace

everytime i try to fuckin freestyle i get shit comments but when i do positive shit i get good feedback. someone who reads my shit, tell me, should i just be positive on everything i type. yeah i like doin that but ialso like to write disses but mine cant be that bad man. someone tell me more feedback