Tha Return vs EX-s

10-12 lines
no d/r or crew votes
drop yo shit

you gonna drop yo shit or what ex?????????????????

first time you came, ya musta got a burn,
wot ya think this time the court gon be adjurned,
why did you come back man, why did you return,
cause this is the second time that you gunna get burned,
so you rap weak, but still you rhyme despite,
i got an idea, get a pen, and copy down all that i write,
then take my shit and bust it on a different battle site,
cause thats the only way that you'll eva rap tight,
yo it aint the end, cause i still got some foresite,
you startin your return, but im already outta site.
goodluck

yo this voting poll looks like mine an i fucked it up.
man you sure this shit works?

Is this guy lyrical challenged or just flat out retarted???/
It took him like four trys, and I finally had to get this battle started/
ur rhyming was weak and the one punch line suck/
now bend over and break out the K Y cuz ur bout to be lyrically fucked/
i dunno what this guys been smokin or has he been snortin???/
cuz he's committing lyrical suicide like I'm Dr. kevorkian/
fagget, ur wack ass verse can't be serious/
do you really suck that bad or does the 'EX' got you rappin delirious/
did you volunteer to be on RB or were you provoked/
you need to write a new verse cuz that one was a joke/

let the voting begin!!!!!!!!!

if ya cant vote, can ya put in a comment anyway
my first battle wanna know how i dun

yo uppin for vote!!!!!!!!!!can we get some votes please!!!!!!!!

Ex-s: You gotta get a better structure in my opinion...I think you need more rhyming in your spit. Don't just constantly rhyme the same words together for like 6 lines. It just makes it look kinda sloppy, the it is alot harder to make your shit make sense. Gotta elevate man...work on vocab, structure, and harder punches.

Tha Return: I don't really like when ppl put those slashes after each line, thats just me tho, but you had good vocab, alright structure, and flow was excellent. You got my vote but you gotta return the favour with this link below...

V/Tha Return........
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=137697

Yo Ralk thanks for the input and the vote as soon as I get 100 post I hit you up!!!!!!!!
can we get some more votes!!!!!!

i wasnt really feelin this battle.... both of yall coulda done better. ima have to go with tha return cuz he was flowin better and he had better punches... Ex-s's punches were whack.. they were not hittin... sorry dawg, ur capable of better.

return the favor please!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...00#post1561900

yo thanks for the input #1 as soon as i get 100 posts i'll return the favor!!!!!

This was a very weak battle on both ends. You both need some work on set up and delivery of punches. Scheme was way to simple, and lacked complexity.

Retrun you had a better verse then ex, at least you came with more punches, better flow and overall better verse. I just think you should never battle kids like ex, I know you didn't give it your all, since he came weak as hell/ This will only prolong your elevation, you need to battle cats that will force you to stay on your toes...

vote = return

hmm,i thing return came alot stronger.
basically all aspects were greater in his,even though both need some work.
anyways,i give my vote to return.

Ex-I think that your verse was very weak. Nothin was really good about it. I guess ya structure was ok, but you need to do betta with flow and wordplay. Punches were played and corny, and ya rhymes were too elementary. Include more vocabulary and multis, how many times do i have to say this to people. Neway, u need more personals cause u didnt have any.

The Return- ya verse was semi-decent. Still needs much work. I was feelin some of ya punches, but to me they still werent that serious. Nice job with personals, still need to add more in ya verse though. ya structure couldve been betta, but overall good flow. Ok verse just improve more

v/thereturn
please return the favor with feedback
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=137940