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Did He?
*yall No I Wonder Why Panic Just Canit*
*aint Granted Or Planted P Fanatik Go At It
Like Its Needed*
*and That It Will Thrill You Not Kill You
*but Will You Die If You Go By A Couple A Weeks With Out It*
*no Doubt Its Hard Ive Felt It But You Should
Give Up How Bout It?*
*it Took Over My Mind Id Mish It To Find A
Better Kind*
*but My Life Fell Behind Like You Rewind A Tape*
*my Life Got Raped Of Every Thing I Love*
*i Found The Lord Up Above To Give Me A Shove
*i Needa Find Peace But A Dove Would Just Fly
Away If I Get Near*
*and 4 Get Fear Its No Longer With Me So God
Forgive Me*
*i Asked Before But Im Still Not Sure IF He Listend*
Did He?
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Upping For Feedback
Come On Man Its My First Post .....
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ehh get rid of the "*" in your peice makes it harder to read/follow
i wasnt really feelin this at all sorry ..try thinking
of better concepts next time. cause this was kinda played,
nor was is interesting to read due to its shortness.
keep it up you'll get better just takes some time .
pz
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Hey Thnx 4 The Feed Man...........
Yeah The Topic Is Wak ..its More Of A Keystyle Really.and As I Got Through It I Sorta Got Into The Issue Of Smoking "p".. ...and I Was Just Tryna Flik Multis And Shitin It
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i wasn't feel'n this what so ever...not just becuz you gave me some bad critque or whatever....
but the rhyme scheme was too simplistic, the words used were all preschoolish and shit...but yea,you got off floe a bit now and then....
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ight no worrys k-d .im feeling ur hate...
yo any more constructive critisism
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upping :::dam man wat do i gotta do 2 get feed on this
