Quick 16...feedback plz...

now when i wake up in the mornin i see warrior slash soulja
im on the come up i done told ya
yall jus like to hate to get a little expos-ya(exposure)
fuck wit me in the wrong way put three rounds thru ya shoulda
now i aint tryin to say imma gangsta or thug cuz i aint
but i got .45 caliber that'll make u faint
u ever stared down the barrel of a pistol
end ur misery now cuz i know no one will miss u
n alot of yall on here got a lot of fuckin issues
suspect n merc dont be mad cuz g-money dissed u
dont judge a book by its cover or by reading a mans words
cuz until u hearin me speakin them nouns n verbs,
im steady shittin on u clowns n herbs,
y'all can pop pills i'll stick to smokin the herbs,
u fagets talk little talk im only here to splurge
u fuckin bitches on here to feel emerged
the major hatin on people is absurd, u heard
let us hear them audios if they wack u gotta go!
cuz i really dont wanna hear them off beat choppy flows
im eatin three course meals while u stuck eatin sloppy joes
i fuck dime bitches fine bitches while u stuck fuckin dertty hoes
now this isnt intended for one person directly
but for all those who dont give me respect see,
im solo artist i dont fuck wit u go artist
any crew on here i will battle ur hardest artist
im not here make enemies,
jus want yall to know we can be coo but i dont want none yall befriendin me!
cuz one false move n i'll have u lookin like a pratical joke like jamie kennedy
yall better understand the power of my rhyme
cuz jus like tupac i'll be here until the end of my time



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=138287
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=136488

don't be usin my lines.......LOL naw koo flow Fam!!!! here comes the haters!!!!!!!!haha

yep^
anyways.....stop talkin bout killin people.
get a subject and take it from there.
get more complex.me complex.you not.
Me internall rhymescheme with vocabulary and actuall subjects.you not.
You need to elevated and start talking about your life,whats real man.
And what your talking about...is not real....trust me.

^^^ X iight are you sure thats not his life..........you don't personally know him!!!!! (I do....you don't)LOL

xtreme u dont know me!! get that through ur head i dont give a fuck wat u talk about u cant rap worth shit trust me i heard ur audios there garbage kid i admit some "some" of my shit is a little blown out of porportion but most of is true cuz i wouldnt talk about it if it wasnt u got that. dont leave feedback on my shit cuz i can really care less wat u think about me

^i dont do audio.im good at text
And im only trying to help.you cant really say that ur life consisits of murder.
If u ever wanna elevate you gotta write on a subject close to your heart.
And even if that is what you do,noone wants to read about it.

yeah this topic is the most used in hiop hop ..its the most easiest to write about as well cause thats what most are familier with.

but i think you should get better topics man... every 1 is over the gun/murder/the im harder than you speech/

oh yeah you rhymed artist with artist then with artist again.. didnt have a positive touch to you peice doing that ...

but it was not to bad ..

stay dropping

I Appreciate The Feedback But Did U Once See Me Put I'll Murder Someone...no, I Did Say A .45 Caliber That'll Make U Faint N I Was Jus Sayin Face To Face Dont Get My Lyrics Twisted Xtreme....i Aint Trippin Thou I Will Feed Off Ur Feedback...gone

aight very good flow but you need to work on metaphores and defintly vocab but it was aight i heard wayyyyyyy worse

lol thanks for the feedback y'all .....lets get some more i wanna know were u think i need to elevate