Fuck A Concept, I NEED FLOW BITCH!

Lots of things make me think I'm divorsed with spot
Forced with glocks,static shocks as static pops
Fanatic heart stop,most inter-line with devine lyrics
Within time spirits would uplift,like life's rough shift
Twisted Individual aint nothing to lyrically fuck with
Dying is my myth, instead of drinking fortey's with filths
Tift,moving head like someone with retarded syndrom
De-parted from a sin-rome, farted because the flem's wrong
Sick as watching a 70 year old lady in a thong, thats ironic
Dripping ass is low like temonic, rhyming slow but the speed of sonic
Shit is bubonic, ebonic making m with diagnosis which is SICK
Efflict the shit that way my illness addict the way i cant predict
My future like ms.cleo, not to restrict which causin conflict.

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yoprettty tight drop homie....man i hate these foolz that sleep on tight drops...damn it seem like We neva get luv huh?...well it had tight flow...aight rhyming conept....aight structure.... a lot of multies..which is good....but overall tight drop

Straight up nigga, niggaz be fuckin hatin on us brotha's we gotta look out 4 each other, If u need me to reply to ya post man and you willin to reply to mine, then i have no fuckin problem droppin real feed, from a real opinion...straight up nigga

aight nikkka stay up!...oh can you reply and leave feedback on :
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it long but its a tight drop that youll enjoy bro!....and if you got any links to shit you want me to leave feedback and shit just PM me em!...peace homie!

Aight man, i told you....


Uppin this!

Yeah, the flow to this wasnt bad - It seemed thats what you were going for was just to perfect your flow, It worked well for the most part - middle section had the lines like .. a syllable or two out each line, but nothing major. Try to get between 12-16 syllables per line, that should help your flow no end.


Pz!

My flow is already perfect from my perspective...

UPPIN!

Uppan suns!!!!!!!!

that was hot, couldve been a lil betta but was definetly feelin it, some stuff couldve been reworded but keep droppin man it was hot

Uppin, will repay all feed man!

Sick as watching a 70 year old lady in a thong, thats ironic
Dripping ass is low like temonic, rhyming slow but the speed of sonic
^^^^
I think that was the worste part of your piece, the rest of it was pretty on par...

Lots of things make me think I'm divorsed with spot
Forced with glocks,static shocks as static pops

^^^^
liked the opener, started the verse off well..props..

Fanatic heart stop,most inter-line with devine lyrics
Within time spirits would uplift,like life's rough shift
Twisted Individual aint nothing to lyrically fuck with
^^^
best part, well elevated lyrix...props....

Straight up nigga, thanks man!


I really appreciate you for really taking time and breaking down my shit, i have much love and respect 4 ya mayne!


And for the cat with the Mike Jones sig, straight up, i appreciate yawll!

this was tight as hell u had me laughin at that line ( Sick as watching a 70 year old lady in a thong) that shit is sick but kinda funny. da whole drop was sweet as hell

Straight Up man!