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I prespired with cold sweat, & trembled in fear
a cold glare pierced my skin, it resembled a spear
Too sick, Keep blessin son....
feeblecus is gay for not saying a damn thing to me` cocky bastid, but ill leave you a nice reply. ;) :rolleyes:
..hmm after reading this i thought .. feebs elevated, you are more into topical now? any way, .. your indepth was very nice i enjoyed reading the emotion and the way of potraition, the rhyme scheme was nice it flowed good while reading, vocab was good` and overall was good .. very nice read. I would break down even further and share with you my opinion on other aspects of your verse but i am at work now, so sorry but cant do now :)
john millard? an iraqi official? name doesnt really go with it, but yea whatever.. dope drop tho..
hmm real nice... the story was written well and kept me interested throughout the whole verse, had alot of good multies which went well with the flow... a few sick lines that really stood out.. the one excal quoted was sick too.. anyway this had really good imagery and i feel it deserves a nomination for OMs of the month..
please hit this up in return..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=2107804
peace
This was a dope verse.
The structure and vocab were fine, youve got a nice flow not many have on this board so it flowed well.
The story in the rhyme was deep there was good imagery the emotion in the rhymes came out well.
Overall a dope post.
Return the favour.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=173174
the entire piece was dope as usual... your upsetting, i wouldnt mind every once in a while being able to give you advice on something, but noooo.. feeb wants to be good or something.. well, no point in quoting, i liked it all equally, another quality drop, might i add the topic is very unique.. peep this jawn
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=172961