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Stories for you to think
Man, these stories here are just stories for yall to think of. Some stories I made up to get you think that people do deal with.
Im gettin sick of hearing stories of a black girl being treated horrible/
Her man outta control and fucks her life up and he's in trouble/
The cops are then chasin him down for commiting a felony/
She all upset that he jailed with no bail and she feelin lonely/
So I start to think, since shit like this exists why do we accept it/
It's because our society today is still too inept for it/
Drugs is a killer, it can kill mind of a person to harm the rest/
People caught dealin and stealin which causes the arrest/
Some falsely accused and locked which causes the protest/
But we suppose to assume the government knows best/
The misjudgement, the misunderstanding of a man is chosen by image/
The one not noticed can be the one callin shots over the bridge/
A man has been killed by shots in the stomach the news reports/
Where in that situation a wrong man can be locked or his life cut short/
The death penalty can be sentenced to a person falsely accused/
The public hates him holdin signs sayin go to hell but the judge refused/
He is then found guilty as "proven" by the prosecution/
This guy is now on death row waitin for his execution/
He can't take it, the hate, anger, the stress, so he pulled the gun/
Shot in the head, he dead, the one on the loose is the guily person/
Then tell me why poverty is seen less than the war in Iraq/
Poverty is a bigger war to be dealt especially the one on crack/
Hungry people are under attack by society who don't give shit/
But people ignore it not realizing that people actually live it/
Cardboard is not what should be a home for a human being/
Do they see them as humans or even care if they're breathing/
Why don't we be helping to get the unfortunate succeeding/
Cause people are greedy and don't care if they're bleeding/
This causes crime cause people are then desperate/
Shit happens and we leave the uneducated illiterate/
Im sick of hearing these type of stories/
And it's not accepted for people to say sorry/
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nice drop man really like these they really get you thinking about them after your done makes you go back and wanna re read them and stuff good job i really liked this and i hope it doesnt get slept on because it shouldnt please return the favor
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uppin 1, more feedback please, thanks tim.
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I like the deeper rhymes so i was feeling this verse.
The structure and vocab were fine i think you need to work on the flow.
Some parts of the verse flowed well but others were just average.
But the flow didnt matter to me in this verse you just got great emotion out in your rhymes it was introspective as well as asking questions about the system.
'Some falsely accused and locked which causes the protest'
'But we suppose to assume the goverment knows best'
That was the best line in the song and it flowed well.
Overall a great verse.
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nice drop fo sho dawgy dawg
not really one i can rap and obviously designed for text only
but nicely worded with poetry skills coo illiteration and assonance
shit is nice coz its keepin it real
keep em poppin
pz 1
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sickness, i like the message(real)
yo check out the sultan's post
i'm sick up in coming
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uppin 5 my last time come on.
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nice job at storytelling.. i like people that can paint vivid pics in my mind
in fact if you get a chance read my own open mic, i think you'll enjoy from one story-teller to another.
great work on this
