1 Verse...need feedback

Im working...minimal wage fuk criminal ways/
what I...did in them days was a pitiful phase
but now I´ve grown up affected by maturity/
gangs couldnt bring security now im just doin me
tried to be sumthin i wasnt and didnt need to/
but this is what it leads to the pain just eat you
if I could, take it back now I probably would/
but thats not being real its fake like Hollywood
it got me good, redeemed me to the laws of Christ/
but life is tempting like a whores entice
probably couldnt afford it twice, so play it safe/
cos your gona get judge by God or the magistrate
but every now and than I have a little streak of crook/
what sets me straight is when I read the book
dont tempt me, my skills havent been forgotten/
couldnt expire this lifestyle´s already rotten
focus on my raps and at work I got boxes to pack/
if I dont get put on the map it´ll be money I lack
just be another regular guy but atleast I tried/
to make an honest living in a world where crime gets you by
weed gets you high roll it in the reef for relief/
find it hard to sleep and my crime times only been brief
but time moves on as I write new songs/
get money by any means whose to say whose wrong?

This was a nice verse i was really feeling the concept and the story everything you said in the story was real and raw.
The structure vocab werre fine youve got a nice flow so the rhymes sounded good.
You had a lot of nice lines in there but this was my favourite:
Juse be another regular guy but at least i tried/
To make an honest living in a world where crime gets you buy
Dope drop.

u wanna battle me

ay lil rage...never battled before but been meanin to get into it so yeh aright...just let us now aright?

The structure was good. Had some nice vocab in the verse. You put some emotion into it, felt the ideas were good. Put wordplay in there, keep that up.

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.