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pain of life
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the pain i felt over the years
all comes out with the run of a few tears
i wish i could of been born into a better life
but i still count my blessing before i sleep at night
ever since i was 3 mom and dad never got along
which left me behind and in the dark all alone
these times of my life left me in a deep depression
broke down and cried everynight to get out my aggression
inbetween all this my grandma fell sick
she was sucha great person why she get cursed with this
remember when she was healthy, it a ever lasting sight
it fucked up to make her better i would give my life
when i was bout nine my uncle got beat in the head
woke up a week later bloody and half brain dead
he was back stabbed, jumped by his own best friend
but when my uncle goes that pussy will also see his end
two years back my cousin was sent to jail
my spirit seem to collapse i was living in hell
he was caught cause of a rat, one of his own crew
this would of never happened only if he knew
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the pain i felt over the years
all comes out with the run of a few tears
i wish i could of been born into a better life
but i still count my blessing before i sleep at night
my boy brandon he was like my second brother
there was 4 yrs between us but we still chilled wit another
he got caught selling weed and with pills in his whip
my life never been easy i'm gettin tired of this shit
he was one of the few that ever understood me
always backed me up and always stood tall
it fucked up how that one day he almost lost it all
and just as it got better i fell in love
with this girl in my class she was sent from above
it true when they say that love equals pain
thought she would help me but my life stayed the same
my boy just got caught wit a gun that was stolen
he might be facing time and seeing green
this is prove that fate can be mean
just wish i could rewind time and set my boy rite
it all went came to this from because of one fucked up night
i'm only 14 and i've been through some shit
it leaves my heart dark and full of hate
but God made it like this for one reason
to test my strenght and to keep my brething
well thank you Lord cause in a way it was a blessing
from all my life i learned a special lesson
[chorus]
the pain i felt over the years
all comes out with the run of a few tears
i wish i could of been born into a better life
but i still count my blessing before i sleep at night
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pretty good shit, nice stucture, but you need to use multies more to make the read go faster. word
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^ thank it not done yet i'm goin to the studio saturday to record it
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c-mon people stop being lazyand fucking vote
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yo that was pretty good it had good structure an vocab not bad for a fouteen year old lol just playin pimp im just seventeen
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thanks iigh lets get some more replies
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bro i feel yo pain and have live the same fucken life....except they took my mom away fo drugs and govmt. shit!!! SINCE i WAS 4 I HAVE'NT SEEN HER.. SO I'M STILL SEARCHIN FO A BETTA PATH IN LIFE... SO I LIKE YO SHIT AND GIVE YOU A 10 OUTTA 10 SUCKA!!!
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nice drop had a nice flow but it took a longer to read than it should have.........great format and topic do what u do playa
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Yo i thought it was a dope rhyme,..i dont think how long it takes to read is a factor, that to me is just lazyness on peeps part,...had good structure and decent vokab and for a 14 year old thats some tough shit to go through i know first hand, but keep it up,.oh and try to use a little more multies.
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^ Thanks That Only Half My Life No Doubt There Is About Another Verse Or Two I Could Rite But Htanks To All For The Replies Lets Get Some More
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lets get some more replies
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it was okay,....nothing special IMO....work on structure...originality..flow..multies...wordplay
