Dedicate

This is dedicated. . .this is dedicated

This is dedicated to the politics who put God in a box
Called it religion in a vision of a universal hollocaust
The cross; We still crucify the ones who will not be coaxed
By mind control, the truth is out there as an elaborate hoax
They ghostwrote the Bible, and then let humanity sign
The small-printed noose just below the dotted line
So I jotted in fine lettering in case this was my fate
And now my bloodcells are in every coke and pepsi case
Sell your soul to the hell portal just to have a voice
And the next carcass the reaper harvests is your choice
They tried to put a limit on poetry - no "live and let die"
But my prose flows like the River Styx drip-dries
Follow the Apollos that lit skies, torching the clouds
Forcing outloud the silence of a disensitized crowd
The mass of flesh; The past destests
This is dedicated to the chosen few, fuck the rest
Cause this is a rare tribute that doesn't read 'rest in peace'

This is dedicated. . .

This was dope. I really liked the first half about the country becoming more secular. Or, at leats, that's what I got out of it. The whole first 1/3 is quotable. Nice shit, Spoken.

^^ for real dope to the dopeness

Dope. This was short but straight to the point which I really like. I agree with what wicked said. I liked the beginning the most on this peice. You opened it up very well. Keep at it fam.

Some very nice lines in this, just wish you had carried that out until the end. Don't get me wrong this was nice, but just seems like you either ran out of steam or time in the end. I've seen this type of thing from you before, well we all do it. Great drop, like the others mentioned some of those lines were dope as fuck, but for a short drop this was great. Now if evey line had the impact as those few, wow...

Thanks. I didn't run out of steam, just put more emotion into it.

This was a very good piece... The metaphor and sheer amount of creativity was excellent. Wicked's right, a large part of this is quotable. I enjoyed reading it, it was of a decent length, with excellent content. You wrote consistantly and had valid and interesting points expressed through very creative methods and devices. The underlying complexity in this was very good...

There is little for me to criticise... Nice piece...

If you could check out "Left to Die" in my sig I'd appreciate it.

Peace

Straight fuckin dope mayne.....keep postin shit like this......i cant say anything else just fukin dope!!!!!

Because you didn't read it.

nice short one here
not read much of your stuff recently..but you continually improve
using your vocab more effectively now and delving into the topic with some nice lines and the flow is better


Sell your soul to the hell portal just to have a voice
^that was ill..from what i concurred anyway

They tried to put a limit on poetry - no "live and let die"
But my prose flows like the River Styx drip-dries
^another good couplet

all round good..
props

fin

Damn motherfucker! I loved it. It started strong and made me say OOH. YOu make a good argument.

This is dedicated to the politics who put God in a box
Called it religion in a vision of a universal hollocaust - great beginning

It was tight and damn u can piss off some conservatives here.

Good structure. The vocab was good and made sense. YOu could of made it longer which would have made it better. Great metaphors and ya got me thinkin. Good job man. Try also to break some words down to make it more creative but this piece was good.

Hit mine up, its called Stop the Separation.

Yup, you're still dope.

I liked this because it had a message that was close to your heart. I could relate to it, something that I feel stronly about personally and you obviously feel the same way. This really spoke to me and it said "Fuck you!" like a subtle middle finger to the faces of those to try to force their beliefs on you. Your message and content stood out the most. While the imagery was strong, it was nothing amazing, save a couple of lines. Just great content here, I don't have to say much since I doubt that deep inside you really care what I think.

This is the best shit I have read unlike some of this bullshit on this site check out my shit i need some honest critisism from a real lyricist rather than a non verbal critic.....Gone

Very nice drop, feelin the vocabulary the way you worded it and the emotion put into it.
Good concept and idea too, wasn't too long and didn't lose my interest.

nice short little read. stucture was good vocabulary was very good you show good emotion and very good imagery your complexity is shown well with using interesting words. overall i liked this read. i was feeling this. al though it was the first piece ive read of yours it was good i know you can do better though.