pimpin(not)

you can call me a pimp but i dont hussle my bitches
ive got them pilin on top of eachother like bodies in ditches
they might not be dead here but theyre still lookin like liches
cuz when i clap off the switches im givin theyre pussies stiches
i should insist that my fuckin will be morbidally violent
like an offense that would land u in solitary confinment
u want ur clit to feel good heres the bottom line sign it
ill make u cum first not a girl out there that denys it
its a damn shame that u never had dick so good before
its my game for sure that made me leave ur pussy sore
and make u scream when im leavin for jus a lil bit more
but i got the full tour girl i dont wanna stay wit some whore
i got on u tonight forget fuckin u multiple times
ur like a rapper tryin to fight for some of those multiple rhymes
and if u didnt get it first heres a replay of the mission
to get every bitch in here to know what the fuck that their missin

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=196809
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=197013

uppin

I'm just gonna be honest thats shit had an Ok flow and you rhymed well but really theres like a million song that have been made this year that say exactly the same thing it reall was not really interesting u need to come at it from a different angle maybe not say it so str8 out and be more creative with it cause that shit was kinda well plain

This was weak. Topic is very played. Atleast you had somewhat of a good flow. Most of the lyrics in here are also played. Could of used some multis. Elevate. Keep at it.

yeh i wanted to make one last 'token' verse before i got serious :-D ill be writin more serious next time

this was a decent piece, you're rhyme scheme was too basic. Flow was a bit off.....concentrate mor eon complexity. you're punches were weak....elevate....stretch out you're lines a bit longer aswell.

You got flow i'll giv ya that but it was weak it sounded like evey other writer

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Originally Posted by Sean Springs

This was weak. Topic is very played. Atleast you had somewhat of a good flow. Most of the lyrics in here are also played. Could of used some multis. Elevate. Keep at it.

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^ Agree. It was very short and it puts down ladiez. Not that I care because that's hip-hop nowadayz, but personally I think that the lyrics are played and could be more original, good structure though.

aight.............the rhymes were pretty damn good homie.....the flow was good.... very impressed with structure...... the topic was kind of interesting...... this could be longer though... to me this was short... but anywayz keep it up....keep elevating and improve also..... :) have a good day

um i didnt read this i jus want 100 posts so dont take it personal

To sum this all up, this is basically a written form of what you hear today on the radio and what you see on the videos. Not really that much to go by, everything is just basic, as far as the structure and the word use. The flow of it was aight, but not that much. Below average in my opinion.

aight...... no offense but this wasnt that good... the rhymes were not good and sum didnt rhymes yo..... the flow was alirght... the strucutre was good..... the topic was ok... kind of not interesting..... anywayz ok job.. keep it up and keep elevating and imprivng... :)