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Mirror
Who is he in this world, will he discover his gift
Gazing in his own eyes, deep into the time rift,
Stunned, and appalled by his unique reflection,
No longer can I critique his lost affection,
A mis-shapened soul, broken from many a fight,
To pity such a simple thing, it wouldn't be right,
False sense of reality, nothing is perfect,
Love's lost immortality, nothing to work with,
It hurts me deeply, to look upon his being,
And intake all these feelings, my hearts receiving,
Looking in the mirror, discussed at what I see,
Even more angry at the fact that the image is me.
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What you see in yourself, you can accept or refuse,
It’s not the right of judgment, but simply the right to choose,
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...78#post3071878
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=227969
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its deep, i like it, its nice. Altho i wud have to say its more of a poem than a freestyle, dont yu think?
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veyr short.. but i liked it very odd tho.. nice wording to it.. i was interested in this.. coulda been longer and more detailed but this was nice nice flow also
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Its short but very nice and deep. The flow was nice and rymes were tight. Wrdplay was aight and nice topic. Overall nice drop bro.
Keep droppin :D
Hit me up on "leave me alone" plz.
Peace :D
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this was a very nice piece you had here nice short and sweet the whole way through i saw a couple of eternal rhymes in your piece and spotted some imagrey i aslo felt the vocab in this wasnt basic but more a complex vision through the eyes only thing i would stress a little is try to incorporate i bit more emotion but overal nice piece
peep my piece please