Too Bold of a Taste

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231051
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231573


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Too Bold of a Taste


Heading to the Dark Continent

‘The Fountain of Knowledge’, a legend clouded in myth
Located in darkest Africa, and shrouded in mist
So now I admit, to being intrigued by this tale
And I made my expedition, from England I set sail
A harsh voyage plagued by scurvy, rickets and heat
The Sun’s rays were relentless, never missing a beat
The whispered words of my crewmates informed with a warning
No-one had ever returned… “Fairytales!” , I yawned, it was boring
Months past and we arrived at this sun kissed continent
Promises fulfilled, it was bliss without consequence
I embraced the beach with a sigh, blown away by this beauty
It moved me, regained my senses and stood up loosely
No time to rest, Carpe Diem, and equipped with a month of supplies
I set my eyes on the jungle where the fountain resides


A Dense Jungle

Mosquitoes swarm, an insect presence, spreading disease
I cut of swathe through the foliage heading through trees
Alien sounds surround me, animals scream under a blanket of stars
Am I standing on mars? This is their planet, not ours
My compass marks the destination with its accusatory angle
I trudge, bathed in perspiration, almost swooning and fragile
Advancing by agonising yards to the object of my quest
The source of all wisdom, I wonder what project will be next?


The Clearing

The tree’s whip apart like stage curtains, a twisted perversion
I collapse from my exertions, the right location for certain
I lift my trembling head and am greeted with a dazzling sight
A marble white, ornate fountain, its maddening delight
I crawl forward, unbearably parched, a tongue like sandpaper
This terrain swallowed up my rations, should’ve made my plan greater
But success is mine, and my body stood the test of time
I’m at the basin, with greed in my eyes, stressed with grime
I cup the water to my mouth, it tastes like liquid gold
Electrodes are firing in my brain that could split my soul
“More.” The urgency increases, I draw in great mouthfuls
Suddenly I understand how to, gather and lead the doubtful
What’s God’s address? Got it! I hysterically laugh
How did life begin? It’s answered in another big draft
The mysteries of the past, revealed, I’m seeing the light
But it’s not enough; I still have to know the meaning of life
Headfirst I tumble into the fountain, a watery embrace
Open my mouth to saturate every pore on my face
The final answer is coming, my brain is raging energy
I should come up for air, but I’m bathed in the remedy
Of ignorance, I’m almost there! But my vision is shrouded in mist
Through my greed I understand why the fountain is clouded in myth

My thirst for knowledge was insatiable, now it’s over, the chase
Because I satisfied my craving with too bold of a taste

lyrically i found it sufficient, but it doesn't sound hip hop, it sounds very sunday morning educational cartoon if you will (the way it had sections and felt very rated PG). not saying i could do any better of course.

agree with nugs.... it was sik but no hip hoppy
the multies were in every line almost and vocab. DAYUM!!

8.7/10

stay fucking up and give feed on my drop alphabetical assault

Dope piece, as usual the concept was very original.
It was cool doing a piece about an explorer and you described your mind state and situation in three different scenarios so it really grabbed the attention. The flow was as usual tight as hell, the imagery and vocab complemented each other extremely well, there was good emotion in the piece too about how you felt in these different places, really dope.
I couldnt hate on nothing in this piece, structure, vocab, wordplay, flow, concept were all dope.

Return the feed:Murdering Multies
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231948

yo, i still like your style Johnny, really dope, the set up once again was spectacular, topics always interesting, great flow, nice and smooth, structure, even lines and also great...... vocab and complexity was definatley here ,man, dope drop, keep it up,man

o yea and check out my new drop counting the days

Thanks for the feed fella's, lol at NugDroHayz's reply. Sunday morning educational cartoon, my arse. This had death in it for a start.

^^Uppin this fucker^^

Man i luv every piece u do, they never seem to lack in anything. The flow on this was on point, the rhymes were sick and usual as were all the multis. Your imagery was mental, how u go thru wat ur seein and all that is crazy. The wordplay was very good, again. Theres nothing i culd pick out bad with this.

Keep droppin.
Peace, plz hit me up on " My Room"

Wassup John that link i left for my last post was shut down can you reply to this id appreciate it.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232302

Up-up-uppity-uppin^^

yet another good piece from you..comcept's were orignal i like the way you discribe your situation and mind state..i loved some off the line's in this piece i could tell it was guna be good from the opener

‘The Fountain of Knowledge’, a legend clouded in myth
Located in darkest Africa, and shrouded in mist

^^i loved that..one off many decent line's in this piece..very nicely done..


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232603
^^hit that its not an OM its a poem but feed would still be very much appreciated thankz

This piece had alot init lol,which was good. In every verse you wrote in this piece you was precise. The vocab stood out aswel very nicely it was strong, and as always your structure was perfect. keep it up the dope rhymes homie.

Tha 1st stanza set this piece up very well with tha imagery being on point and the scene was set perfectly...

|Mosquitoes swarm, an insect presence, spreading disease|
|I cut of swathe through the foliage heading through trees|
^^ These two lines in the second stanza also had great imagery

Tha only flaw i can find in this piece is that i couldnt pick up tha flow of this until half way through tha second stamza...otherwise this was a great read

Could you help me out with feed on tha link in my sig, would be apreciated

*returning feed*


dope peice bro, I noticed one cat said it doesnt seem hip hop but meh fuck that. This drop is solid. thats what potry/rap is about.. being creative with concepts and coming original. Thats exactly what you have done here.
Imagery in this is dope! This is a good read even thopugh the its very lengthy.
good solid peice bro.