Dont Want No War!!!

"Aimed at anyone that dont like my flow"

Chorus

Dont want no war
Then dont talk no shit
Dont Want no war
Then dont talk no shit

Mane, fuck yo flow, Cant step ta dis
You dont really wanna hear dat bullet hiss
Cus mutha fucka,I dont fuckin miss
You dont really wanna meet my fist
Nigga ill be rippin yo ass apart
kickin yo ass,from da start
be rippin out yo heart
im shootin 38's and loadin up a hollow
Do u think you can follow
yall cant spit, so u must swallow
You aint gonna live to see tommrow
Be swimmin wit the sharks,and i still aint been stepped to
cus ya know thers no life guard round, when da crhome wets you
So step to me, if ya must!!!!!!
ill take out the AK, and wipe off da dust


Chorus

Dont want no war
Then dont talk no shit
Dont Want no war
Then dont talk no shit







Ya, the structure is not so great, but it cant always be

Nah, i wasnt feeling it.

Your acting like a thug, your not.

write something poetic.

die

^^lol, poetic, dis rapbattles homie, keyword, RAP... but anyway, this was aight, i think it would have sounded better on an audio, but i know you probobly cant do audio, me either, but overall, i give this a 7/10 based on flow and originality, not that original, but i liked the chorus, catchy,... keep droppin fam...

~one~

It was ALRIGHT. Id give it a 5.5 or a 6 out of 10. Your bars were too short and there was nothing real in the song, you were basically just talking. Also it was 15 bars, a verse is 16 so you mustve missed a rhyme or something. Stay up and keep improving!

ummm.... ur on RB .....u aint killin any one .....u mite have a gun....well scratch that i doubt that....that was way to simple...rite something thats gone attract atetention or atleast thats gone challange ya mind and skill homie word...

peep the links in my sig

your fow is off alot of words dont fit and your structure sucks