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Glock Cocked
ya so this is just something I put together so rate it 1-10 and feel free to leave some comments thanks niggas
I got it stuck in my boxers and its ready to explode/
Gonna fuck up a nigger like a hacker fucks up a code/
Who you say, well I dont know, any random person/
Gonna cap a nigga then just gonna keep on searchin/
A rampage is what I'll go on to show the world my fude/
Gonna kill a babys daddy make thier table have no food/
How mean I am, how bad this sounds you already know/
No idea why i'm saying this guess i'm givin a reason to duck low/
Maybe I actually dont wanna do this just a evil thought/
Or maybe what I truly want is for me to get caught/
Take this menace of the streets before I hurt another/
Put me in jail and let me get fucked up by some real brothers/
I'm an animal so put me in a cage leave me alone/
My life was filled with violence and thats all I've also shown/
So I still have my gun cocked still gonna kill someone/
Going to take away from a mother her only living son/
What is wrong with me, why am I like this violent and disturbed/
This is how my daddy was I thought I would have learned/
But no my glock is ready to commit a dirty sin/
Its torturing me feel like yelling PUT ME IN THE PIN!/
I then look over and see a little boy sitting on the curb/
Maybe I should end his life he looks very distubed/
Walk over to him ask him who he is and what is wrong/
He said that he has nothing to live for his lifes been to long/
He said he is a failure a disgrace to his own families name/
I clutch my loaded glock and think hey hes fair game/
I say hey well guess what, I can help you out/
Make you beable to smile again not just pout/
He says O really how would you get to doing that/
I smile and take out my hand gripping my loaded gat/
He just looks and stares says nothing at all/
I say hey now this is where your sadness will fall/
I point it at his head and the safety is unlocked/
Look towards the sewer and throw away my cocked glock/
(If you dont understand what I am trying to say at the end by the fallness of his sadness was that I had a problem the urge to kill and I threw it away, and he can throw his sadness away right with that, I will probally have a sequel to this like titled Glock Cocked(Part 2), if I make one and you wanna check it out da link will be in my sig? thanks niggas!
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THat was hott...structure was much more improved. At first i felt you were just running with it... but at the end the story unfolded and it was deep, moving, and very well-thought out. Nice flow. The only thing it was missing was multi's...work on that next man. i'v seen u really elevate over the last week, keep it up man, good job...nice piece and i don't ussually give out good ratings but
8.9/10 woulda been even higher if u had multis, good shit tho man.
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hey thanks man if you wouldnt have actually explained structure to me, I wouldnt have been able to do that, so thanks man that shits dedicated to you 4 helpin me man
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I feel so loved....You wulda figured shit out eventually, all u have to do now is work on that multi and you are gold kidd. Next OM we'll do it togetehr in a featured OM
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first off , u aint hard , ur jus a fake ass e-gangsta , get over it
second i can tell ur a newbie by all the damn slashes in ur verse
u had a average structure , ok flow , but no vocab or creativity get a better topic also
peace
jus feed no hate
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nigga that om had nothing to do with being hard or anything man fuck off dont say thats not hate, it is your shit aint hot man so I wouldnt be sayin shit dude
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cudda had a better title.. glock's a bit paid.. y'll needa be poppin sum ppk's n shit nugga.
this drop is pretty coo tho.. nice flow and dope format..
sa bit long for one verse shudda split it inna 2 ya get me blud
the flow and structure thins out and goes off near the end a bit
all in all a pretty nice piece
Holl@ my OM link
Prison Food
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238396
pz
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mic you've left decent feedback on or this will get closed, thanks.
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Closed.
You've got to put 2 new links in every new thread, you lazy fucker. You are officially on the warning list. Pull something like this again and you're banned from the forum.
