Lost Love (deep Shit )

Ayo this is some shit i wrote for all peeps
suck in a fucked up relationship




At First we was in love,and the feeling was Strong,
1 year later and that feeling is Gone,
cause we argue and Fight,We can't Get Along,
so many nights i cried cause you aint come Home.
I thought i was in love, maybe i was Confused?
Cause i 'm left feeling emotionally Abused & Used.
Inside i thouht we Had something Special,
But you flipt the script like Mr.Hyde and Dr.Jekyl.
At first you was about Pleasing and Treating Me,
But now you constantly decieving Me,
and i can see Threw ya Lies so Easily,
it's so Sad you not tha Man you Used to Be,
But I can't take The Lies, I Can't take The Hurt,
so many times i tried and my pain you not Worth.
Cause you Continue To Lie and Cheat,
Fucking around with hoes running the Street.
So I gotta Go Time to Cut Him Off,
Cause Tha Love i once Had Now Is LOst



Holla with some Feed Back




my links
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=237528
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=186182

i wuz feelinthiz shit, it wuz the truth and U spoe yo feelings, i can relate to thiz a whole lot yo. good job, work a litlle bit on that flow okay and it'll be better also your vocab coulda been better but it wuz decent, enjoyed it

thankz
for tha respond
uppin for more....................

yep you're welcome. and checl out my collab with mz. blaze in a minute aight check that out and hope ta C U do more work yo

cool
yall in a crew or something ?

this is pretty cool.. emotional piece with just then right amount coming thru without making over the top...
i felt it lost rythm a little somewhere after mid- verse and 1 line from the end.. or maybe thats just the structure of it...

Inside i thouht we Had something Special,
But you flipt the script like Mr.Hyde and Dr.Jekyl.

nice of you to throw in something of a meta / punch.. it all runs pretty smoothly

nice poetics

stay up

At first you was about Pleasing and Treating Me,
But now you constantly decieving Me,
and i can see Threw ya Lies so Easily,
it's so Sad you not tha Man you Used to Be,

^^ those lines were killa. They so damn true girl-i'm in a situation like this, and i'm readin it thinkin, damn thats me. Your topics so far have been hot, and interesting to me. I know alot of dudes dont really care for these topics, but i'm feelin it. we gonna have to collab sometime though.

yo im not feelin it i couldnt feel ur vocab u wasnt passionate but it was good other than that just try to work on ya vocab and ull b good aight

so next time u could just come back a little harder aight son good try though aight just evalate aight homey

i aint one for emotional pieces but i was feelin the vocab a lil bit but thats it

needed to elevate

did you honestly think i woudl check your links? you didn't reply to either of those pieces you cheeky bastard!

Closed, and now you're on the warning list.