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my life
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...30#post3506030
wannabe thugs ready to look ~death in the eyes~/
when they last thought comes its ~livin is a prize~/
poor familys surviving and ~livin it hard~/
everyones lost someone close so ~hearts are scared~/
and everyone wishes ~pain will stop~/
but thats like saying ~rain wont drop~/
im strugglin to ~forget my troubles~/
but then ~shit just doubles~ and everything ~around me crumbles~/
rumors turn to ~secrets~ in one revolveing circular ~sequence~/
my mind is the ~last to function~ my rhymes ~mass destruction~/
thinking that the ~worlds harder~, and will i survive like its ~pearl harbor~/
and that my ~family~ is trying to get me to plead ~insanity~/
good thing i keep a ~strategy~ by thinking of places i'd ~rather be~/
i've witnessed ~older phines~/
that ~shape~ and ~mold your teens~/
createing ~hate~ for ~colder schemes/
like ~mistakes~ that ~sold your dreams~/
feeed
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uppin for peeps to drop there opinion on my scriptures
EDITNESS: Damn i gave sum peeps feed on there verses. no love?
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ah, its hard to get feed here... cmon sumone show sum love
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The multis didn't work too well if thats wut you attempted. Played topic, but you made it out in a coo way. Weak wordplay, but good flow. I unno, it seemed like an average - below average verse. I don't know your emcee ability but, yeah
Keep spittin'
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rhymes werent even tat good the really didnt rhyme that good
topic was igiht....a lil too simpaliar..and lines thta did rhyme werre good
vovccab was not ehre..weak as hell..flow was iight not really good
strucutre was off in palces..eleavte a bit.....peace
