things happen

Chorus
Man, I look at the rap game today nd i say Things happen
Man, you see today the rap game is more than just rappin
It turned into a game of usin guns and knives
We betta save this before rap dives
Man, i watch the jay z video sayin things happen
Wat if i evrybody in this industry just stopped rappin

Verse 1
Today u mess wit a rapper nd its off with ur head
They'll have u gushin blood lyin in a hospital bed
I look at 2pac nd biggie nd i say things happen
Sometimes niggas die cuz they get involved with stuff more than rappin
I look at p.diddys success today nd say things happen
Now heres someone who did somethin more than rappin
From charities to relief funds
Maybe he'll get his name on the package of hot dog buns
then i look at myself nd i say things happen to nyone
I used to be a lil white boy now i rose to fame son

Chorus(2x)

Man, I look at the rap game today nd i say Things happen
Man, you see today the rap game is more than just rappin
It turned into a game of usin guns and knives
We betta save this before rap dives
Man, i watch the jay z video sayin things happen
Wat if i evrybody in this industry just stopped rappin

Man, I look at the rap game today nd i say Things happen
Man, you see today the rap game is more than just rappin
It turned into a game of usin guns and knives
We betta save this before rap dives
Man, i watch the jay z video sayin things happen
Wat if i evrybody in this industry just stopped rappin

Verse 2

Nigga i just realized that things can change
Some rappers today goin crazy nd actin strange
From sellin drugs on the street to havin no shoes on there feet
The only thing they could do good is rap and make a good beat
Nd then u get some rappers that would do nythin to sound good
They try to talk mad gangsta like they from the hood
Now i proved my point that things happen
U can have a good rap battle nd then start slappin

Chorus
Man, I look at the rap game today nd i say Things happen
Man, you see today the rap game is more than just rappin
It turned into a game of usin guns and knives
We betta save this before rap dives
Man, i watch the jay z video sayin things happen
Wat if i evrybody in this industry just stopped rappin


Kinda my first song so comment on it tell me wat i can do to change it nd if its good or not

I'm a lil bit more gangsta wit my style, but i feel ya on it...i like ur message cause u just spittin on ur opinion regardless...i like the topic..the rap was ok 4 me...same thing u said wit mine vocab was a lil simple...structure was straight...just keep on homeboy..not bad for ur first open mic

thx for the comment i thought it was pretty good thx again

not bad, not bad at all,.......jus try to make it more visual and try to use more vocab

hey this wasnt bad man....topic was cool....flow was medocre...flow in places then chopp in otherz..complexity wasnt all here homie ..vocab was simple same with rhymes but they were still good overall this drop wasnt bad.keep elevating..peace--

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Originally Posted by ~Skribble~

hey this wasnt bad man....topic was cool....flow was medocre...flow in places then chopp in otherz..complexity wasnt all here homie ..vocab was simple same with rhymes but they were still good overall this drop wasnt bad.keep elevating..peace--

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thx guys i guess i should keep on doin this thx for lettin me know how to fix this

at first, i was gonna mention the lack of wordplay and metaphors, but didn't realize it was a song till i kept reading, so yeah for a song it was pretty good, wish you could have had maybe a couple more verses or longer verses to get more into your topic instead of just the hook....good job though

thx for da comment i seen some of ur oms they were pretty good but i think i did good for my first time

this was good.... i think it could be alot better. the structure was understandable, easy to read, but fams you need to extend your vocabulary. i felt the topic, but i can't relate my selt to it, but i still felt your concept. the flow was ok.....bit on and off situation but it still was an ok piece......7/10 keep it up fams

WoRd^^

Fams can you pleaz drop an honest opinon in my OMs in my sig.......Thanx

uppn in this shit come on comment my work lol hurry

:2thumb: uppin come on comment in this please :coolio: