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Flamin Massacre
aiight well dis wuz supposed 2 be part of an audio collab but my comp went screwy so iss jus gon b text 4 now
So dis is how it starts, take u back 2 tha beginning/
Kiss tha sunlight goodbye cuz ur hopes'll be dimming/
Keep ya mental chained up, I'm a verbal lock n key/
Hit me wit lightnin verses, u still ain't shockin me/
Michael row ya boat ashore, dun got no chance in dis game/
If ya heard I wuz a loser musta heard me minamed/
Leave ya fightin wit my ocean of deep n heavy punches/
You back bitin dumb habits like bulimics missin lunches/
Got you up n packin like tha brown box store/
My words are like meth, u'll be back 4 more/
Strika ya demolition, u can't get a demo listen/
Othas knock ya flows n u accuse of pessimism/
Punch buttons wit each sentence like jailers hurt jackets/
U may arrive in one piece but u leave in a casket/
Veins only cold when I leave you frozen at tha mic/
Admit ur failure now before u deep in dis fight/
I'm destroyin ya reputation like George W/
Ain't deployin tha nation but I'll still trouble u/
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yeah u know how much I like dis shit mama... good shit my fav lines
Strika ya demolition, u can't get a demo listen/
Othas knock ya flows n u accuse of pessimism/
So dis is how it starts, take u back 2 tha beginning/
Kiss tha sunlight goodbye cuz ur hopes'll be dimming/
Keep ya mental chained up, I'm a verbal lock n key/
Hit me wit lightnin verses, u still ain't shockin me/
yea but tha line i aint like wuz tha last two bars ur closer gotta be sum knockout shit nice opener thoo
imagery- iight
vocab- jus a lil low
punches- other then tha ones i mentioned decent
keep doin wut u do
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hey, yip I'm on this site too...I loved this one, though it was short. The ending was nice, never wouldve thought of it. Great work with this one...
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okbut short.
elevate please.
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ma i feel u cud do a lot better.....the punches came aiight. flow cool. gotta fix ya wordplay mami.
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shawty, i kno you can do better then this...jus up ya vocab, try n get a crazy ass topic that original, so people will feel ya flow, anyway decent ish ma' stay up.
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aiight yeah it ain't my best, my "dun hate tha femcee" is a lot betta, dis wuz jus a quick thing I made 2 do on audio
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good shit son, could use a lil elevation but not so much as to where it throw's your style off. keep it real. peace
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