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Trait
Married folks can't manage, no hope in romances.
Oak is damaged; family trees cast broken branches.
Stroked in canvas, painted perfect, a tainted mere myth.
Custody battle, brothers & sisters became peerless.
Drugs, aquatinted their kids, addictions help came.
Dwell pain, "not your fault," but listen to self-blame.
Wealth claimed, half-and-half, I get this, I get that.
Kids and cash, green over blood, true love unmasked.
Some ass on the side, guys act sly, begin to drop lies.
Hours extended, perfume scented, lipstick on ties.
Wives open thighs, lonely, milkmen become lovers.
"His" love is for work, so "she" gets it from others.
Some smothered by relationships, mates that quit.
Couples climax, wedding day, as great as it gets.
Faith that slips, break the kiss, false marriage vows.
A sacred oath, that's tossed around too careless now.
Air is foul, vultures in courtrooms, ravaging feces.
Lawyers, circling broke families, scavenging pieces.
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Hmm....y didnt any1 feed on this piece...this was dope..
Married folks can't manage, no hope in romances.
Oak is damaged; family trees cast broken branches.
great meta..
Wives open thighs, lonely, milkmen become lovers.
"His" love is for work, so "she" gets it from others.
dope line right there too....keep it up...the structure was good...the flow was "okay...but this is text..so who cares...the vocab was awesome...8.7/10
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yo this was tight i liked it, vocab was good but the only thing i didnt like that much was the structure but other than that everything else was good. rhyme scheme could have been a lil better but it was fine, u had some nice multies in there and i like that. i dont care much about vocab so overall this was a great piece so just keep elevating and keep up the good work...