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I'm Not Bitter
I'm Not Bitter
I'm not bitter, life couldn't make me a quitter
Turn me into a Hilter as fate became sicker
So i'm not bitter, even though hope is a flicker
Pick myself up again and get my focus much quicker
I've taken my fair share of blows like a pro porn star
Been trampled in a stampede by a horse drawn cart
Snapped bones back into place, got thrown back in the race
Spat the blood on the pavement and continued the chase
Between my grandfathers death and a friends suicide
Heartbreak which made me feel like i'd sooner die
Well who am i? To book an early seat for the afterlife
A few near death experiences have passed me twice
Nearly drank myself to a coma, couldn't handle it sober
Throwing up jack and cola, over and over
Blood blisters marked my eyes from dehydration
Thought process was reduced to senile contemplation
Got stoned, talking philosophy, making a prophesy
Couldn't make the transaction to action from hypothesy
Cursing my own reflection, and public attention
Nearly gave up on my dream, felt too sick to mention
But i'm not bitter, life couldn't make me a quitter
Turn me into a Hilter as fate became sicker
So i'm not bitter, even though hope is a flicker
Pick myself up again and get my focus much quicker
Links soon.
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This was surprisingly good.. I expected more of a story, but was given this. It flowed well and you used good vocabulary. It was fun to read, a nice break from the complexity and heavy vocabulary of the pieces I've been reading recently..lol.. Keep it up, nice work
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Drop was gd shit
Flow not bad
Structure improvin
Rhymth kk
keep@it
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nice drop
flow ws gd
structure ws gd apart from one line
rhymin ws gd - gettin complex which is wot i like
keep droppin, and can u leave feed on 'My Last Letters' plz http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=267335
notice feed tht Kongol left on ures, and then look at post 11 on mine - its da same
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Your beginning I don't know if it was a chorus but I wasn't feeling it but besides that you were creative I like ur first porn line it was well worded too N' ur structure was okay could of been longer but I make short OM's too neway keep it up.
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Well this was a good peice yo...topic was aight.....Seemed a bit plain...but u made up for it with your sick flow...sick rhymes..and excellent multies......vocab was great..nice and complex...overall this peace was really good..enjoyable to read..was easy and smooth to reead....keep it up..peace
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although this wasn't the best i've seen from you, i still enjoyed it alot...your imagery was excellent (i liked the first 2 lines of the verse)..your vocab was above par..emotion was nice...but what reallly stood out to me was your flow..it was so smooth from the hook to each line in the verse back to the hook..and your hook was sick!especially that Hitler part..overall i enjoyed reading this, i was expecting something much longer but with a topic like this..it was pretty straight forward..keep writing!oNE
please hit up my OM with feed: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268442
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Nice drop fam, powerful verse. I was feeling it. Nice vocab, cool topic, and solid hook. The flow was flawless as well. I couldnt really find anything wrong with it, it was solid throughout. Keep doing what ur doing.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268657
