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Suicidal computers..
Blip Blip the javascript is flipped to slit the wires and expire
Gripless chipsets cuz the entire empire is required to retire
Digi-mental mindframe, a restrained brain in the card bricks
Tell motherboards n other cores to erode on our hard disks
Engines equals junkzones junctioned to system malfunction
Items crawl outdone in humanoids prison-walled dungeons
Terminated terminals string-reaching post mortem beacons
Decode nodes to death by default as their modem weakens
Recontroll consoles protocol and end-process joyless souls
Reboot to mute, can't compute when these droids gets old
We hate it, The Matrix got our faith fixed as seasonal tech
Sending logic inputs in secs as outputs of emotional wrecks
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the flow was alright at best .the ryhme scheme has some potental.so just work on it a bit more and you'll have yourself a dope ryhme
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the flow was good but the topic.. hmmm was aight shouldve tried something more decent fel me? it wasnt all that interesting didnt realkly amuse me or anything so try to come more seriosu next time or try to make it more interesting to ya readers
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try to come more seriosu next time?
Haha, you didnt get the point here, did you girl?
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i liked the combine rhymes you used like in the begginning that was nice
(Blip Blip the javascript is flipped to slit the wires and expire/
Gripless chipsets cuz the entire empire is required to retire/)
the flow was ok it was a wierd topic suicidal computer but you made it into a good om i liked it
Verse 8/10
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i didnt like it duh.... in my eyes thats not what i enjoyed did you get that
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i think u picked an interesting topic--it made me laugh, i ain't neva seen nothing like it tho...
the flo was ok and ur vocab--well, what can u say? j/k
i think ur scheme had potential and with a lil revision it'd b a tyte piece
keep postin & return the fav plz...gracias!
-Mari
"Letter From A Ryder"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270190
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