Mother Natures Apocalypse.

Mother Natures Apocalypse
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There was a horrible disaster once foretold, many years in the past.
It was mentioned a natural danger, the whole blue and green mass.
So strong was the fury of nature, gave the most devastating events.
Man vs. Nature put to the test for the crime, facing the consequence.
Mother Nature’s been abused too much, she couldn’t take it anymore.
Her patience has gone thin and her whole beauty and heart was torn.
So the rage swept across to the heart of the ocean, causing a tsunami.
Echo of her raging voice across the valley plains, “You cannot stop me.”
The unstoppable waves overflowed and flooded the seven continents.
People were fleeing for their lives, they did not know what this meant.
Now as she got more fiercer, she unleashed the devastating Hurricane.
The winds ripping throughout, has Mother Nature really gone insane?
Still the same, but the natural disasters are affecting the entire earth.
In the west, the winds were picking up, creating sandstorms from dirt.
Then up in the sky, the clouds start to darken coming with lightning.
How was once a beautiful place, turned into something so frightening?
The Priests and the prophets were gathered, and they looked so shook.
The Prophecy of the Apocalypse was true, exact year it was booked.
They should’ve had not abused Mother Nature, look at its form it took.
Not just stand there littering, while other people just watch and look.
So the storm came raging on, never even ceased, not for a second.
With floods, forceful winds, and storms, it was a fury to be reckoned.
Now the fury was out of hand, God had tried to weaken and stop it.
Mother Nature’s sheer fury seemed to go on out of hand and rocket.
There was pollution everywhere and was toxicating the earth, burn this.
Alas He saw no hope, and decided that the people really earned this.
The apocalypse was truly this day, and God said its what they deserved.
I mean, who would make a planet, just to see it get wrecked and disturbed?

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...6&page=2&pp=15
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sorry son the feed u left in Ed's thread don't count.... cah even a kid could do that...
bet chu hardly read it!

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Up Negros.

this was nice throughout i liked the way you potrait your emotion.. it was very well expressed, your flow and vocab where on point` and i really liked this for osme reason, i could advice you though just to work a little on your rhymesheme cause it didnt really approached me well.. other than that, keep writing and itd like to read more of you in the future.

good job.

Yup.

shit yo....this was sum sick shit.....rhymes were tight...multies were nice...vocab was pretty good too..topic was interesting and very interesting...I enjoyed this peice...flow was sick..flow was smooth as hell...strucutre was like perfect...this drop was excellent..nicely dont man..keep it up...

This was an ok drop, Somedecent shit in there, You should work on your rhyming more and not strething ya verses that much it'll help the flow out, keep dropping tho its the only way you'll elevate.

So the rage swept across to the heart of the ocean, causing a tsunami.
Echo of her raging voice across the valley plains, “You cannot stop me.”

^The weakest lines, I'd say. "You cannot stop me", spoked by Mother Nature, sounds rather childish. In my opinion, you should've just made all the hirrucanes and tsunamis BE those words, y'know what I mean? Somethin' like "Those cataclysms were the Nature's last words" or shit like that.


The apocalypse was truly this day, and God said its what they deserved.
I mean, who would make a planet, just to see it get wrecked and disturbed?

^PROBABLY the best lines, in terms of the topic, except that you fucked it up big time sayin' "I mean". In such a philosophic theme, you shouldn't use vulgar terms like "I mean", "c'mon" etc. Rememeber your Martin Luther one? You ain't used nothin' like it there, and it was better.

I see you're into thoughtful spits and shit :D

Keep it up ma' man.

Peace.

Krit!cal.