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The Truth Hurts
I stress and impress the teens, wid deception themes
Recept intellect like receptions scenes
Protest the green, steam from election scripts
Detest the teams, with protection clips
Or throw sections tips, like dissection tricks
Either way strays stay stealing your collection TIPS (collection plates)
Than deception hits n drift till aggressions lit
till theres nothing left to do but send succession hits (succesors…like presidents. Etc)
Its obsured the way verbs hit hard when they serge
N Urge those herbs to express words when they heard
But Burps the extent of the words for these nerds
So sure the words mean less when they merge
They curse every verse whats worse is its SAD
They burst when pain lurks, yo stay calm instead of MAD
Cuz no words can help us get us through the struggle
Hence why they so many niggas staying on they Hustle
Or maybe they just trying to forget there last huddle
Cuz of the Drugs n da violence may have refused you to bubble
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Some original shit right here Good vocab descent flow....My only problem is i ain't got a fucking clue as to what message you were trying to convey. Maybe you could fill me in................... I do like this joint right here though so.........KEEP SPITTTIN
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self explanatory....
uppin!
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To strait..
Start leaving better feedback, or I'll start closing your pieces.
Your links stink.. hoop blah.
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yea i know, but i was in school and class was almost over so i had to quick put something up there. sorry
uppin 4 feed
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I agree dat da originality was there, but 4 me, even tho i catch ur topic, the short length of it kinda left 2 much 4 interpretation...I think u had mo 2 put down (or so it seemed) but u were in a rush---TAKE UR TIME!
I like ur flo & da vocab dat u used...u had some good Internal's 2...
Overall, nice drop, keep doin dis jus work on lengthening ur pieces so dat ur reader isn't wondering if there's 'sposed 2 b mo...& keep up dem internals ~1~
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nice nice I'm cosigning the whole verse. the wordplay was smooth and the message was legit. that's a banga in my book.
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the rhyme sceme was perfect, but i don't appreciate the shortness to this piece i felt you could of kept going dude,the structure was okay, the emotion ? where was it? i mean almost everypiece i start to see these days fails to have any....the imagery was decent could of been more vivid, the voacab below average, im not kicking you in the ass on your skills im just trying to help you perect them....decent shit elevate more man peace
