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Mission Complete
There are 2 gunman surounded, in the building on East. Pass.
Watching the frontend, a fiend in a ski-mask.
He grasps his9 tight, hoping...praying that he lasts.
Bows his head to repent, sees something, and he gasps
...a red dot sitting spot-on his knee cap...
Looks up, draws, and squeezes... *click* "shit!", forgot to cock it
The bullet leaves him cripple quick...there was no way to stop it.
S.W.A.T moves upstairs slow, using shadows for cover...
One suspect down, they're looking for the other...
Suspect #2 isn't alone, he's got a prisoner.
The first ladys' tied up, and he's contemplating killing her.
The phone rings, it's the chief pleading no blood is spilled.
#2 barks demands on the phone for 5 mil in unmarked bills.
He hangs up the phone. *quiet* then footsteps outside the door.
The hostage screams "Your dead!!" ,he says "shutup you fucking hoar!"
He hits herwith his gun and knocks her onto the floor.
A sniper watches from a tower across the street.
A second later the suspects brains are across his feet.
Good always prevails. Mission Complete.
Ill leave my links in a sec.
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Ok first thing i'm tryin to figure out if someone is surrounding the gunmen or they are surrounded where they are goin to attack...Takes me into the presence of the gunmen with grab words
Swat takes out Gunmen #1 without showin me much interest..but story goes on...
Prisoner escapes without much conflict...
Feed:...Peice is basic...simplistic but informative...shows insite..but doesnt exactly grab the readers attention with eye catcher....drama was at a minimal and was taken care of without much effort...
Make this peice longer and it will increase dopeness...
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thnx dvs. cmon need some feed
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this piece was quite good it had an Ok story to it and the structure was really good flowed well. It was still a lil basic but showed some insight nut wasnt informative enough overall quite good keep em commin
peace
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cmon now, 42 ppl read this and 2 leave feed? help me get better
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Closed. Next time put in links which weren't from 6 months ago.
