We

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we watch...upon the achievements and lies
taking no sides... following both angels eyes and demons
while walking along the cloudy skies


hatred flies by sounds in bitching as you savour lies,
you dont have to shroud your vision with forsaken pride
& be proud of living, to see whats past the naked eye
you overlook an evolution theory provided by science
souls took in polution to hide behind a faith in deniance
we scope earth and its violence, all the way to the core
through the sky as my fence,
even named their neighbor the god of war
indecivable we elevated beyond the believable, in peace
feeble & inconcievable leavein one in dirt, after deceased
to rot and become food for the worms, you feed the yern
to do it over...yet when ur alive you worry about germs?
you create enough pressure to make a snitch
can you relate to this,
that even controlling your destiny is a dictatorship


we watch...upon the achievements and lies
we take no sides... following both angels eyes and demons
while walking along the cloudy skies


half past your lifes admitting being lost as fuck
put yourself in us,
searching among life through the cosmic dust
we have no purpose but to observe your hasting
debating,
if we landed wed be imprisoned with no explaination
suffer, for passions of a conscience you use to vaguely
insanely,
once the world rumbles like a muffler,
and crumbles, we suffered the same thing
so we shall save thee
are we god? no... but our hearts extend in stealth,
and think as a group insted of ones self
we contridicted confrontation, your love is stuck
your government is a beauty among nations...
.....................because there quick with coverups
shhhhh... right here, right now, my computer is hacked
this isnt Bo6vious, but we, shifting realities shaft
like moses and his wooden staff, we stand moralized
the reflexion of us through mortal eyes,
makes us immortalized
we left our planet with blank stares in
the devastation when the stars fell, we flee'd
and we made our appearence...
there wasnt a weather balloon at roswell...t'was we


we watch...upon the achievements and lies
we take no sides... following both angels eyes and demons
while walking along the cloudy skies

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no stupid comments please... *fresh thread*
due to this^

uppin#1

i was feeling this piece nicely worded
you was very consistent with your flow
nice structure ,,nice vocab not too simple
some line were a little stretched but overall this was a nice piece
keep doing ya thang ....................................

^i know at times it was a bit stretched... but the flow makes up for it, look for internal rhymes and rythmn

Up You Mutha ****a

pretty niice through-out the peice.
rhyme sceme were ight,
flow was on point throught-out.
vocab was niice.
structure was off in some places but didnt hurt any.
concept is good also.
overall peice is very niice. could be better if elevated in vocab and rhyme sceme.

up up and away... leave links, ill leave good feed

i will up this 500 billion times before i get another feed :mad:

*ups this till the end of fucking time!*

Damn...feelin the vocab alot, but it seemed that the topic had alot of ways to explore it and to be honest I loved the way you went about on this piece its very original.The very few things I don't like about this piece is the way it lacked the chance for you to put any imagery and emotion in it.But I loved the creativity 'n the vocab that this piece contained.

Overall 7/10

it was a little to stretched for my liking. some good ideas and some good lines. it was all over the place thought. you shouldnt focus on vocab and inner rhymes as much as you should on the actual piece. kinda took away from the whole piece in general. little hook was ok. first stanza was the better of the two. nice drop though man.