All Apologies

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Yup, i'm back and now i'm fucking off again! Sorry RB, i know y'all miss me :givesaf: . But my job gives me no net access for months at a time. So i've penned this up really quick to get back into practise and get some critcism. With a little luck i'll be back for whatever topical tourneys going on sometime in feb. Enjoy:


All Apologies

It's a fucked up world we live in, today the setting is fear
If armaggedeons on the way, arm-a-geddon outta here!
A karma circus, acrobats flip with sudden explosions
Plus the strongman dropped a nuke 'cause of an itchy scrotum
And clown's cause mental erosion, the crowd gets cataracts
Lion's tame ya, hit with chairs and whips to splatter the wack
This is metaphor to rattle you back to reality
So you can all hold your nuts while 6 weaves this trapestry
Apologies for my absense, i've been educating the young
Make them contemplate some knowledge and the place where's its sprung
Plus i've been making some funds, had a taste of the tounge
From a girl with a pretty face, who was amazingly fun
But this is a fly-in visit, i've gotta hit the road again
Time to stretch my soul again, disapear and go within
So all apologies RB, stay staying sparkly
Sit back and spark weed, 'Are you gone 6?'
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naah only partly

wat a big steaming pile of wtf come johnny man you can do oodles better then that man how about next time you take a min an write something proper
but never the less good to see at least something

This was good, I chuckle at the scrotum line, Lol. Welcome Back J-6. The word-usage was coo, I can't say much cause its short, but the flow/rhyme scheme was decent. I'm looking foward to see new pieces from you.

this was cool...i mean i can tell you didnt even try and the mlties in this and metaphorical treasoning was cool aswell man...nice to see you back man last time i saw you was aour collab in picture perfect....but yea man nice drop here...i know you can do btter but you said you pnned it up quickly so...nice drop all together though man and nice usage of vocab aswell and wording.

RTF on Tears shade red..link in the sig

lol...dis was madd funny yo...and yea u can tell u basically freekeyed it on here which shows yo writing skill already...but yea good quicky...more plz...hit dat "Understanding The Unknown" plzzz

This was a pretty good piece man. There was a little comedy in here, and it was still yet a true and harsh piece. I liked the references you made in here, and I just liked the overall way you captured your thoughts in here. Multies in here, and just a good and practical piece man. I liked how you put things in here that were hilarious and still fit in. Good job.

Heh, drop was funny, had a taste of seriousness
but not too much. Glad to see you're back man
keep writing so we can see you droppin ill like
before you left.

if you get a chance, drop feed on my OM

SS: Connection - Poor to Bad, it's at the top.

yo j get a laptop or a mobile internet or si\um shit then post more rhymes more often.........ha




neway what i liked was--

A karma circus, acrobats flip with sudden explosions
Plus the strongman dropped a nuke 'cause of an itchy scrotum


lol........ick ish f'sho

And clown's cause mental erosion, the crowd gets cataracts
Lion's tame ya, hit with chairs and whips to splatter the wack
cool ish

This is metaphor to rattle you back to reality
So you can all hold your nuts while 6 weaves this trapestry

dope-ish f'shp ish.......ya weaved some bars well together there...........


Apologies for my absense, i've been educating the young
Make them contemplate some knowledge and the place where's its sprung
liked the rhymes..............dropped well with the flow


But this is a fly-in visit, i've gotta hit the road again
Time to stretch my soul again, disapear and go within

6nice ish f'sho...woven finely..expressional even..........

So all apologies RB, stay staying sparkly
Sit back and spark weed, 'Are you gone 6?'

ima spark em n grow em as well .nah mean.sativa


wheres thye fucking rest tho j i was just gettin into this joint...now you OUT


BLEH


BLESS


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