Hand-me-downs

Hand-me-downs

2nd Generation
Eatonton, Georgia

The thread wear’s thin;
I solemnly pass ‘cause of my fair skin,
But my bloodline suffers the savagery,
Blasphemous rare kin,
I bear sin; I’m unforgiven,
This dungeon of hate; Under the influence
Of injustice; Soon drunken with rapes-
Bigoted torture! My misery screams
“You cowards ” How sour it sounds,
But the epitome of history exceeeeeeds the power of now,
So my needle relieves the demons,
The hours when I’m down,
Dreams of freedom; I now fight on powerless grounds-
I’m Out; The redeem in rapture;
Causes the thread to end; The weaving plastered,
Into seams I’ve mastered; Not so distinct,
But the cheapest patterns; Can’t afford
Any more until next month; I’ll receive it after,
I feed my seed and capture;
Her face full of gleam and laughter-
Newly woven;
The uniqueness bleeds, and truly spoken,
Few are chosen; I dare to drown in the bluest ocean,
In the smoothest motions; I bargain to finish, while
Each hand delicately cradles the art of remembrance,
Years past, I’m lethargic and timid; And slowly
A fading mind, the farther the image,
But death is only scarring the living,
So I leave a needle and thread,
In hopes that she’s a startling resemblance.

Generation
Milledgeville, Georgia

The thread wear’s thin;
The long days are overbearing,
Housewife and mother of three,
A ferocious pairing,
Unaware then; Never expect them to pity us in-
This lifetime; My feet hurts,
Boycotting the city buses;
Minister King says “He who is trusted”,
But why must I still weep through the roughest
times; The movement seems so ill advised,
We’re fighting for rights that’s so civil,
Yet they fight back uncivilized- And
I'm Out;The timing I fed,
Causes the thread to end; The outline of her head,
Is perfect; I admire and ponder the growth,
Keeping in tact with every stitch,
The warmth of her soul; Honoring those
That bled through our tumultuous blows; It’s why
I pray that my daughter has her
Wondrous glow-
Newly woven;
You never know, so take the chance first,
The aches stifle my motions, and now my hands hurt,
Any plan works; We hope for better improvements,
Each hand forces my last repetitive movement,
Days go by; My face confused, dismal, lost,
Causing infected joints to produce crippled thoughts,
So brittle, flawed;
So I leave a needle and thread,
In hopes my only daughter is never this feeble when dead.

4th Generation
Atlanta, Georgia

The thread wear’s thin;
Still fighting, but now it’s reflecting,
On ourselves; Black on black hate,
The despair in,
You paving the way it’s so apparent; But we
Can’t follow if there’s never a parent
Around; Guns fire- A savages sound,
Crime rates up- and the activists down
Lavishness crowned; And the fools rush,
We were given the playing field,
Yet too stubborn to suit up; Struggle!?
Even the Klansmen are enraged,
Cause our shoes cost more,
Then the hands that were slaved; And
I'm Out;Couple of blemishes, toughness
To portray reality in her face,
The finishing touches;
Causes the thread to end; The swirling wind,
Projects the mere beauty in a world of sin;
A breath of fresh air, as I sit on my deck;
While revisiting the last loop holes of
The past that is left; The miraculous depth,
From the centuries enslaved,
To enrichment from the memories engraved-
Newly woven;
More than a hand-me-down,
Feelings of everlasting love;
Mutual family ground,
A friendly ounce,
Of expanded heart,
Through generations of branded art.

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-Nique.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=310092

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=323200

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=323148

damn i like how u did this...but damn this was the topic i was gonna use u mad me not wanna do it anymore. but the storyline was easy to follow and wasent boring...i like when u extended the exceeeeeeds lol.it didnt mess up the flow or nothing. u followed the topic a good way.the vocab was good also. u brought a diffrent storyline than i would have imagined for this topic. u mad it a bout struggles and fighitng them the hand me down was the drama. i liked that. but this was a overall great verse. this shows why u are one of the best on RB.

rtf.

im not a freshman. im a fresh nigga nique. recognise. but damn. tis is very dope. i like the suspense you kept me in until i seen the picture. i was like wtf is going on? then it all came together. its dope. its a different style for you but you made it work. nice job nique. thats that shit. A.I.

pZ

Another well written piece Nique. The imagery was dope and the flow made this really easy to read. You incorporated alot of detail, which painted an image in my head that was confirmed by the actual picture in the thread. Very nice. Peace.

Man, this week of SS is over, so I can up this now.

Omg Nique you actually don't know how much I like this.This was just brilliant.I'll just read this again and again.It jus clicked with me, its the sorta piece for me that you wanna read again and again.Imagery was fantastic along with creativity.Wording was just brilliant so cool and perfect in my view.This is what RB should be competing against and hopefully people will learn from this OM.Ima give this a HoF.Probs on this

-Dyl

this was incredible, your flow was excellent, especially considering the long length of the piece

great job on the storyline, it has a lot of depth when you even detail the different location changes and you really stayed with the topic the whole way til it culminated with the picture

a superb drop by any standard

2nd gen came in the picture poetically, such emotion you brought to the table from a mere thread weaving of a womens cloth. now during the 2nd generation the piece came together, a mother baring her next-generation child through struggling times, during martin luther king jr. then the final exert was done with more hard times..
the flow was unique...

Well....apparently this piece was good enought o beat mine int SS, So I give you all the props you can get Nique....beautiful piece....I'd say it's one of the best I've seen in a long time!

Keep up the good work!

Pz.

I personally didn't like this as much as your other drops. for me, this format is very familiar with its deep roots in poetry and internal rhythem.. and right here I didn't really feel it fit. the flow for me was very hard to get down, and with the absense of any real punctuation as a guidline, these line breaks kind of slipped through the cracks and blended into lines that they had no part in. I mean, you had punctuation, but.. only cama and semis. conteeeeeectually, this piece is great though. aside from my struggle to keep with the content because of the formatting, you had very beautifully written words. the story was creative and original.. deffinately nothing I've caught before so I loved that. all in all, I did like it.. I just had some hang up on the structure you chose.

^I just came to the conclusion that you just can't follow my structure, lol. Sorry, but I can't do nothing about that. Thanks for the feed.

I want more feed on this, actually. Thanks.

I usually don't like peices like this but it really captivated the topic and you expressing willingly it seems. Good job 4.5/5

dont up old ass pieces dog, closed