High as fuck freestyle (a tired 8 bars)i thrive in

im high as fuclllllklk..............................

okaay, the fact is, im spittin saliva lava in my matress
to relapse myself, and not collapse like a c list actress
im the fastest rap scalion to run around the atlas
with fashions ranging from having black and white matching
i fascinate even myself with lyrics while im high
you better fear it like when your passing elm street by
grinning with red teeth, positioned to hunt and eat
and defeat any antalope with a mic between the hooves on their feet
im killing this beat while being recorded for poughkeepsie tapes
im the guy whos chasing that chick in the kitchen, its great
its fate, so dont debate its nothing, its not a compromise
im the most bloodthirsting villian who cant be killed and never dies
I thrive in the hate that breeds between your heart and soul
fueled by coal, my fiery mind can burn a whole in your core
my tongues the sword, slicing up and down like a bungee cord
and ill finish up the rap with a, "fuck you whore!!!!!!!!!!"

im going to slep.............................................. ..........sl[e[e[p

my feedback raps:

twilight zone
call of duty

weak, no concept to this, just very random. You had a decent flow going for the most part, but besides that this was pretty bad. Try coming up with a topic that you want to write about and stay on track with it or else people are just going to rip you everytime you drop something. Stay up.

lol i was high as fuck man so relax