[fear]

Feeling Everything Approach Reality

Fighting Emotions And Reason

Finally Ending Another Relationship

Facing Eternity Alone Regretting

Frequently Evading Anger’s Rage

Fixing Errors Also Restoring

Forcefully Engaging Alternate Routes

[FEAR]

Very short - so it leaves a lot to be desired.. however, with what is there. this read incredibly well. It flowed off the tongue brilliantly. Even tho it was short, it still had a good message and the concept was nice.. had this been twice..3x as long.. with the same good flow and word choice I would nominate this.. but just to short. good stuff tho. good talent.. a lot of potential

like spekz said this was very nice wording i just wish you expanded alot more on this i feel you could of had a brilliant poem here you just made it too short and it seems it wasnt finished the ending had me hanging.. i like that but you just needed to expand alot more with this keep it up.

I liked the flow in your poem and the way in which you wrote it. I'm not sure i'm too happy with the way in which it ended though. It was abrupt and left me wondering. Part of writing poetry is finding the right words to cement your mood and i believe you did that very well here. Good job duke.

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dog this shit is hella poetry

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Originally Posted by Arnold Friend

dog this shit is hella poetry

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what more can be said?


nah but this was a cool drop. It encompassed a lot of thoughts and emotions that are familiar with people, which was good. I do think that it was a little unfocused in its content, in that you kept everything at arms length. The emotion was distanced by how broad the language was; narrow these feelings down and the emotion will intensify. But in any case, it ready very well and was enjoyable, good work.

good drop it had flow