Grains Of Sand

Grains-of-sand...watch thetime fly when we Raise-tha-Land/
the pains-of-man cause the sand ta turn red cuz they slayn-from-hands//
we follow the games-demands..money,pussy n big booty is wat it takes jus ta Tame-da-man

hearin the Glocks-ring....its worth 1 witness ta pick outta the Cop-Scene
tha mans Drop-ings get them off the street no more crack the raps Stop-Fiens
cuz they thirsty for more-raps
but they open up gats n unload even more-caps
4-hats wit holes..layed in pits used as floor-jacks

teens-wit-babies make them bitchy like they mean-wit-rabies
i seen-them-crazy...its my hope jus ta change the dreams-of-ladies
im switchin flows cuz its obsein-n-maybe we'll be able ta see the money if the cream-aint-shady

kids pickin up weapons jus ta please-a-fan
plattered thoughts show the debrees-of-man
so like the hour glass flipped we still keepin-sand

ayo i was jus so bored so i spitthis shit real quick its like a keystle but i made the flow switch up like if the the beat changed while i was freestylin so thas y there different flows n kinda different subjects

but i was bored so i jus did this but i wanna kno what people think i think its straight but what do yall think

leave me 1 give some feed back


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c'mon no feed back some 1 hit this up

I liked this piece...i liked your multies...this flowed pretty well i thought as i read through, fell off at some points but it was ok...your vocab was pretty good...the content was good...overall it was a pretty good piece...keep at it..and keep dropping.

thanks homie can i get more feedback.............................yall sleepin

This was ok , ......but get rid of the bold looks realy newb, ....:0

but it had some , ....nice multis in it, .....go to the sec page and check my collabs wit Potent, and mystik mind maybe u can learn from that ?,....jus tryin to help ya ,. ......nice drop ^

good lokin homie but i like the bolds n by the verse u can tell im not a New-b

oh n i put the bolds cuz thas how im expressing what i say so peeps can get a better visual instead of puttin all caps so that it could make it sound like u say that werd wit expression nah'mean

Nah when u write good, .....theres no need,......peeps will know :)

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