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at first glance i thought....not good....i dont like paragraph much..takes away the read......some of ya lines were ok...but ya need to improve ya vocab n structure.......wasnt feeling this.......introduce sum nice metas n shit...aight...pZ
You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get deleted...
But this was ok....you have to work on your structure, dont put it in paragraph form like that though, put it line on top of line so it has good structure cause when its in paragraph form some people find it hard to read and keep reading....but other than that it was alright...keep at it.
thanx bros. . .
what do you mean by three names or 3 links though?
you have to reply to three other open mic pieces in this forum and post links to your replies, otherwise your thread gets deleted.
read the rules, it goes a bit more in depth.
thanks.