[REMATCH] Professor Frost vs. Kungpow [Frost wins]

uppin

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Originally Posted by Professor Frost

Escapism tactics -- when withdrew, made us monkeys do natural back flips,
Like we had reversed time's stream of evolution; performing acrobatics
It's in our natural habit, to see sin & go grab it,
Till the truth seeps in through forms of static,
That disrupt our brain's airwaves; deconstruct society's stairways
Until we've stitched a blanket of ignorance, fabric by fabric

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to me this verse had the vocabulary - but imagery also was dim. what i quoted above are your best lines. and i feel like almost your only ones. there was parts in your story that didn't add up which made it hard to get what you were talking about.. and example is this

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Fuck religion, embrace God, or choose the proof
Or let your weak mind have politicians go eschew ya views
Either way, we're all going to hell; we were born for sin

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Let it be known the souls of humanity have laid to death
Slain the rest & paid the debt of air, to save the breathe-
Of Earth's atmosphere -- some body ask heaven's Jesus is it clear?

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was this a religious piece or not??? so it was confusing me a bit.. although it was a good read with rhyme schemes you had. i dont think you brought enough to edge this battle.


v/kungpow

My fault not sure what happened to the feed i left kung but here it is again

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Originally Posted by kungpow

resulting in seismic activity throughout the world
tectonic plates shifted under ocean floors around the globe
setting off massive quakes,volcanic eruptions, and tsunami storms
that engulfed every continent formed
like earth opened up for a moment
just to swallow itself whole

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ending dope. but to me this was quite a boring read. i think if you incorporated more imagery describing things and emotions in your piece it would have made it more affective. the lines i quoted were your best, and if the rest of your piece had imagery like this quote it would have been dope. the ending was cool though. overall rhyme scheme was cool, flow was cool.. but like i said it lacked imagery
overall an ok piece to read..



that was to add to my vote

This battle been up wayy to long. Frost wins 2-1.