Elevation Thread.

First..... the topic was stupid... so that showed in the piece.... second by looking at your piece and looking at the topic u gave I think your confused on what multies are.... theres a link in my sig I think u need to check out...... but overall its was bland... just going through the story ....with a few played metas.... it was jus blah...

Now......... your topic Sux kid.... throwing in as many rhymez as u can in a piece looks/sounds retarded... it doesnt show skill .... it shows a lack of taste..... and destroys the flow of a piece.... blah. Shit that aint even a fucking topic... its a challenge....blah

So sick of the ignorance spewing outta mindless mouths
I profoundly doubt these faggots know what multi-syllable rhymes about
Refined and stout their stupidity stacks high inclined in doubt
hidden behind the grout, they tile wordz unknown up front to hide the doubt
they blindly spout off wordz they have to google jus to find a meaning for
I wanna find and ream these whores til their spines and minds deceased and more
Its time to see that your.. not golden.. your shine defines no gleam to soar
rewind the time and see that your skilless & weak...kinda like a squeemish girl
blah............
blah blah blah............

topic.... The ignorance of someone using words that they dont know the meaning of

man cats these day sayin shit,half of it they dont know the meanin/
they cant find out wut they bein/
so they go on da net to find a dictionary/
man all these cats a gay ass faries/
if u gonna say somethin no the definition/
if no then say hello to my suspicion...


nt=goin somewhere where everybody wants to beef u

that topic was weak homie

aiyo gangsta that shit was wack
how you a G and you fraid to get shot in the back
lemme tell you sumthing, you aint shit, fuck around me ill empty my clip
ill spray you while you rideing on the whip kill you when you sit
you like cream i dip you in a cinniamon whip

That topic was weak, but you ain't even hit it up,
This kid needs a hot air balloon to get it up,
Don't try me, leave a subject the next time your rhyme,
I leave this kid puking with green in the face more than a line,
I crush fake emcees, and erode their courage,
I'll have "carnage" turning into "murkage"
Have you spinnin' and yellin "HeeHee!" like Mike Jackson,
And guarantee you get your money's worth with this action.

Topic: The World as it Spins

U fuckers need to start reviewing the kat before u and leave FEADBACK....MORONS.....

Exact.......blow.... alot of played lines.... alot of stupid lines... blah blah blah..... MICHEAL JACKSON LINES ARE PLAYED AS FUCK!!!!!!!!......... and why do u have carnage and murckage quoted.... it aint wordplay....WTF????.... its weak to quote wordplay... its even weaker to use quotes to quote random wordz.....blah

topic:the world as it spins
(wtf??? u couldnt come up wit something better....blah)

bubbles pop and bursts of air hit the inside of my stomach
tingling sensations tremble up and I try not to vomit
My eyez get flooded... and visionz blur trough my sockets
I try to hold my chest....clench my neck and just try to stop it
But I feel chunks of somethin flow upwards and out like rockets
now this ride called 'The World as it spins' is covered in Vomit
blah..blah...blah

topic....... Hardships

your flow is a bit choppy, but overall your stuff is ok.
I also like the topic
Hardships



Hot dogs, bologna, macaroni and cheese,
if yous lucky, this is what you ate on my streets,
puttin more sugar in the coolaid wasn't a easy feet
cause moms is havin trouble makin ends meet
Concrete is the jungle, it surrounds us all
at the age of 13 you start husltin small
within a couple years your gettin the raw
cut it up, make some money till your dynasty falls
just cause you couldn't afford to get those new clothes
Sitting in jail was inevitably the path you chose
mama's wipin tears from her eyes and snot from her nose
wishin you could come back and ease all her woes
if it is too good to be true it is
thats the main reason we need to teach the kids
about hardships and the right way to live
cause without education ignorance ain't Bliss

NT- describe witnessing a driveby shooting through your window

I think there was good content displayed, a fresh approach sorta was taken, although I think you need to add different rhymin techniques to keep people readin along because I got a bit bored... Overall pretty good though :D

A fuwkin gun went off, two guys have just hit the floor,
the fuwkin car sped off, the two guys move no more.
I cannot believe my eyes, i can hardly breath,
i try to move my thighs, but my chair i just cant leave.
sick feelings reach t'bottom of mi stomach, i have to hold in
the idea of what i had jus seen, was an unholy sin.
as stood up, i felt it, i'd just swallowed my pride....
i turned round, i saw it, I'D DONE A SHITE!! :(

LOOOOL

Next topic: Losing the remote control.

p.s don't be too harsh, it was a joke... i think what these boards need is a bit of humour (good or bad :P )

u had a good opener. and nice second sentecne
but ur middle was kind of weak.
ur really good for a newb tho, elevate


i lost the remote? whered it go now?
idk but hell, i aint leavin the couch
too lazy, nigga this shits unfair like hell
cuz the last time i changed manually...
.................was too long ago to tell
"honey! get yo ass here, change the tele"
"and where the fucks that food for my belly?"

blah..weak ass shit i spit! lol


TOPIC:Worlds Collide "heaven, hell"

aaahhh man the opener wasnt that good. nothin rely rhymed but at the end it started to pick up. u should have used bigger words but its all fun n games here so keep on elevatin.

those two words dont mix like ariforce and rap//
completely diffrent frazes like pissin and takin a crap//
when those two worlds meet i dont want to be around//
but if i am i take the devils side cuz im completly hell bound//
i know god will hit me with a lightning bolt from the sky//
but i bring all thunder to him untill the day that i die//
iv been cursed by the devil from the day of my birth//
i dont want to see that day,
so ill continue to keep peace on earth//

next:witch rappers u hate

Some of the rhymes seem forced. Mixin both topic and diss at beginning was good. Some of the flow seems a bit off, keep the same number of syllables per line.

BTW. I'm a much better teacher than student.

I dont know any "WITCH" rappers, but I would hate them all...
Although the rappers I hate are anyone who fakes being raw
Ja-Rule's a wack ass faggot, who thinks hes the shit...
He's probably a mommas boy, still suckin on her tits
And singers who try to rap, just plain fucking suck...
Like that herb Akon, sounds like hes missin a nut
Fuck all the homos, keep rap gangsta please...
No fucks with scrapes and bruises on they knees.

probably just contradicted myself...
next topic = sex on TV

The first two lines was okay but the rest was
really simple.Work on your vocab,
nut,fuck,shit,tit too simple......

sex on t.v

Nowdays they show anything on Television,
Not Caring is kids is Paying Attention..
I'm watching a Pg13 Movie my son was with Me,
All of a sudden thety showing ass and tities..
Kissing and Hugging Intimate Touching,,
so i coverd my child eyes so he would'nt see nothing...

Next Topic...........The End of tha World

yo ya rap was vivid.i could picture my mom doing that to me years ago..lol
but naw for real i like the way it flowed and it made sense keep it up homie..

we know the real champ is in here(ME LOL)
im sucking the blood outta this mc like a vamp was in here
ok mr detroit or should i say Eminem(ThaChampIsHere#1)
u tall and even Ethiopeans aint seen no one as thin as him
all we get is six lines
so on each one ima diss u six times
ur a loser i know u wish god could fix time
boost ya self up theres no need to try slacker
u a bug and my complexity swallows u up like a venus fly trapper.(JOOK$)

next topic: y do ppl rap when they know they have no skill

the Topic was a good idea, your rhyme lacked substance and complexity, the punch at the end was pretty weak, but you've got the right idea it just seems like you need to take your time with writting.



Why do people rap when they know they wack
everybody's a critic and they reply right back
and say your rhymes off track, so many times this crap,
blows my mind like crack, till i finally snap,
if you've shed some light and told someone their lines ain't tight,
they try and fight, instead of using lead to write,
and better the rhymes, we as competitors try
to help ourselves, until the letters run dry,
so if you’re, who this rhyme is about,
keep your opinion to yaself and shut ya f#ckin mouth

very nice flow.u rhymed ya shit well and it was on topic.keep it up homie..
u could have used bigger words though but its all good


y u flowin the same this cats not sloid hes liquid like creme
this is the game and ya rap carear was juss a dream
i juss gotta message that says IOU and that was from a fiend
my crew is multitalented
the flow i multibalanced it
dont ever come at me with that lame shit
i run the street governtment like William Renquist
my whole vibe is picture perfect u might wanna frame this
how u gonna think about runnin next to me
when i took your advice and made raps with more rhyme complexity..(JOOK$)

next topic/ what should we do about ppl that dont leave a topic

first off,your shit was tight,fairly simple but creative and on point,you got good punch lines,it could have some more complexity but it didnt lack complexity either,very solid rhyme scheme,keep elevatin and droppin.~1~


we should take em all and line em up
ask em questions like wheres your mind
can you rhyme or what,no buzzers
oops ya time is up,no recollection
of any of my questions
cant remember a simple message