Left Out | Write-In

Think i'm Petty Scum? Nah, I'm not one to Leave Wet Stain
Inside of Every One, There is things that can't Be Explained
Watch me Recieve Pain, Then you'll see the Time of my Life
I never Concede Games, Fact Is, Your all Blind to my Sights
Rhyme in the Night, Living out metaphors of Creative Words
Crimes that Entice Can be classed as right of Native Heards
Sedative Blurbs Exist When someone's Emotion is Expressed
Yet theres no Expressed Emotion, With Devotion in Process
The Process of Devotion, For me is too Dedicate to Nothing
I'd Meditate to Bluffing, Shorter than I Hesitate to Roughing
Now My Fate is Scuffing Like my shoes Then Write my Blues
Would Be Like Capturing, The Whisk of Summer Skys Line
' Visual Contact Blurring ' As soon as Another Trys Mine!!
Contrast a Drive By, Viewers to you Keep Hand Jive Alive
Street Plans Size Lives, UnLike Huge Waves While Wipe Out
I Doubt Hype while everyone else Mouth Like to Hype Doubt
Me Being Depressed, Is Like Seeing a Bless, While I'm Dieing
I'm Fleeing the Rest And then Greiving Incest, Vile in Trying
To be a Part Of Something Yet me being alone Does Though
I Cant Afford Attire, Meanwhile everyone else Loves Clothes
My Mood Changes, Just Like Fashion, If I ever Write Passion
Then I'd Just Write, My Lifes Gashing, & The Frights Gasping
The Nights Lasting For Eternal With A Noctornal Pony About
Thats a Night Mare, I'm In A Terrace And Its a Lonely House
My Only Spouse Is Connection Between Scribble Complexion
The Best Of My Correction Is that I have a Liberal Objection
Sublimal Election, With Wrong Doings As The Only Candidate
Such Weak Affection,The Irony that a Fony Stands Straight
Is Like Me Not Having Much On My Mind, While Everything Is
What Could Be Is Not For Me, I've Shown I've Medley Limits
Said To Be Finished? Nah I Finished Be to Said, I'm Just Aye
Yeah I'm Left Out Like you Bully Me The Way You Push Play.

woah!!
I've read some of Potents shit before but on this man ya flipped it
ya use of continous multis created such a good eerie flow i was
impressed to fuck! i had a beat on at the time coz am recordin a track and i found ya lyrics go sweetly to it. Ill as hell.. i know i sound like am lickin
this guys ring but the story was deep but not too overwelming
like ya took it as far as it could go
ya vocab was on point and not too overzelous...
so ya gave it that touch of class that some peeps find hard
good thought out piece
maybe Legendary?...maybe not..
lets hear others peeps opinions
big props mayne

Lol...U know what im thinkin man, I dont need to post it on here....

But anywayz, IT WAS BY FAR THE BEST I SEEN FROM YOU...!!!

Keep it up, or ells im comin to ur place to brake ur legs...Lol..!!

like the flow on this one
came tight and kept it rockin the whole way through
first line got to me right away
this was just bascially and over an azming peace
wouldn't mind hearin it ove r afat beat in an audio man
keep it rockin

Yeah thanks for the replies guys, That makes it worth my time writing this, I may decide to do another two 16 bar verses and make a long song with 'em over a fat beat, lol, anyway, i appreciate it.

I Cant Afford Attire, Meanwhile everyone else Loves Clothes
^^ill
think this is probably the best ive read from you, some real meaning into it,,, and a smooth flow going all thru.. the scheme was pretty consistant and didnt go overboard at any point..... yeah ,,this was well worth the read.... the length put me off, but once i started reading.. like i said very good....

Shiiit Pot1ent... Illy as fuck. Loved the story, flow, multi's, hot hot hot

but watch the overuse of big complex words, I can see a tendency to lean toward a bigger word where a shorter, more to-the-point word, would have worked out. Just an observation but nothin wrong with that verse at all dog

props

pz

Multis were ill. The flow was good. It was a nice piece. The only thing I'd tell you is to stick closer to a given topic. Besides that, it was a pretty cool piece. Keep doing it homie.

-W1

Potent. . I've Always Wanted To Do A Collab With You Ever Since That Soldier Drop (That was you right ?) Multi's Were Dope, So You Know What That Means. . FLow Was On Point. . Content Was Ill. . Vocab Was Great. . Although Like $pit Said, Don't Over Do It. . Wordplay Was . . Wow. . Best Shit I've Read From You Man. . Please Keep Droppin. . Pz.

Sedative Blurbs Exist When someone's Emotion is Expressed
Yet theres no Expressed Emotion, With Devotion in Process
The Process of Devotion, For me is too Dedicate to Nothing
^^^ Like I Said. . Wordplay. . Wow. . Dope Man.

Thanks again for the replies, This is the first drop for ages, And yeah Formula that was me on the soliders Open Mic. Up for some more feed, thanks. If you want replies to yours, leave a link.

Like the way it all flowed together. Good vocab' use - don't lower your level. There wasn't really a central topic just seemed like your thoughts flowing from your head - which I like.

Overall - 8.5

Damn Pot .. I haven't read nething from U in a while .. And this piece is so much better than the last piece I seen U wrote a while ago .. Ur elevatin' into a dope writer so quickly .. This piece had a sicc ass rhyme scheme in it .. Multi's were dope .. I liked the concept behind this piece .. U executed your ideas very nicely in this piece man .. It seemed well thought out and was nicely written .. A lot of quotable but I narrowed it down to 3 ..

Sedative Blurbs Exist When someone's Emotion is Expressed
Yet theres no Expressed Emotion, With Devotion in Process

The Nights Lasting For Eternal With A Noctornal Pony About
Thats a Night Mare, I'm In A Terrace And Its a Lonely House

I Cant Afford Attire, Meanwhile everyone else Loves Clothes

I felt those were the deepest and truest lines for you in this piece outta the bunch .. And those were my favorites .. Very nice .. It's good to see U elevatin' man .. Mad props on that .. Keep writin' .. One

This was really nice i thought....nice to see you back posting again :)....you had some nice multies in this, like every line had multies, it was nice.....Your vocab was really good as well i thought....you had a lot of good lines in this....structure was great i thought....had nice emotion, it was deep....overall a nice piece.

damn...that was the most creative use of multies of seen so far..much propz mayne..shit was ill

Thanks and I appreciate the feed, Anymore?

POT1ENT hit me up bro, i miss you.. Pot ' Ed 4 life.

This verse was tight
The flow ill
Wordplay off the hook
I'm looking forward to seeing more

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Originally Posted by Edicius

POT1ENT hit me up bro, i miss you.. Pot ' Ed 4 life.

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Why the fuck would you bring up a written thing that is of drinking age?