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Listen to You Heart
Listen to your Heart
https://youtu.be/Hf_J-PWE7Mc
It's like you know the key in the end
And your grin
Seals it in
With your smile
So when it begin
In sin
After all the truth within
Cause it's been a while
Look at me
Let me see your eyes
Your disguise you think is so free
What's really got me caught up
In all this switching shit… you know the touch is so me
HOOK
So tell me hero
What's the superstar shit have to do with me
Why your disguise don't quench my alibi for the darkness I love to see
Or when your coaching me
It's cute, it's strong, it's sexy
But so they say that's your game
Then dang
Bang - game tight
It still ain't right tho
You have my heart and you know it
On my knees
Begging you please
Don't make me show it
HOOK
Ain't got shit to do with dough
I hear you like a bug thrown up in my ear
But this torture done lasted for years
Not an annual year to year
Done with a smile, nod, as they cheer
But this, just to remind me of my fears
But I'm no longer scared to face him either (just did)
I made them a believer
So, what do I do?
Tick tock is ticking on the IOU and You? Betray Me?
Couldn't be!
I'm scared tho… would you?
Can I still trust you?
Like knights in shining bright armor be true?
HOOK
And this is all the shit I was going through
Trying to get to know you
The worst of you
Not the image you portrayed
Being another type chick… would I of stayed?
Obviously not…
HOOK
The most guarded so how am I the victim
My heart in your hands not even getting the attention
Not like I ever needed it before
But that's my score
Did I forget to mention
I'd lay down and die too in 2.2
No matter which disguise they can't hide their lies
I don't need to even see their eyes know no mo'
I know your true
Cause my soulmate told Im kinda like yours too
But what does it mean?
This was the last song I heard before the omega screamed
For once… I actually need the help back
But I don't get it
That still don’t' mean I regret it
Or am gonna let it
Or that I'm even gonna set it
Your heart beats too
So maybe you tell me, what's yours telling you?
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@The Great Father
BTW, It was this one I was talking about on that
I'll get my links up for the 2 I posted today tomorrow guys... pls don't close them out. Thx
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@Professor Frost
Oh and this one too in case that message didn't go thru either... SMFH
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I like this. It really spoke to me on a personal level. Your telling a story of a female whos went through some bullshit in your life, because of a fellow male. Us assholes huh? lol you did a GR8 job.
In general it was really nice
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Don't usually read other feeds before I post my own, but this time I did since it's short
It seems to me like the female character in this piece is on bullshit too a bit
As in, I guess they're tryna find common ground...? Lemme read again
So yeah... Those first 4 lines of the final verse are my favorite
Very vivid and thought provoking detail, especially that "didn't need it before" part
I was like, ohh shit, you thought some things through
Her heart's really in it, and I guess the man's facade bothers her mind at times
But she likes it to a certain extent... Either interpretation I take, this is a good read, becuz
It opens the door for dialogue whether vocally or mentally... Keep at it
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@not in nice thank you cause yeah... I spit real not stories and I'm alllll fucked up! Here's to fixing my mental!!! LoLz
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This was some real shit here girl....damn.
Regardless if this is a real or made up story....you told it well. Truly set the stage for each bar and gave the reader a background to follow the story. Seems there is a deeper meaning behind this piece and maybe is a push for a part 2? lol
Keep writing. It expands the mind in tough times.
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With that being said...
You can't control a man (real men)
So if he not showing you love, then fuck him.
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I would never try to control a guy and you're right... I am so like fuck them.... BUT... Have you ever been in a situation where you might have been all fuck them but it may have been a mistake?
@Not N Nice
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@patric bernier thank you too, btw. I used to write str8 and gr8 short hand too... Are you from the south? It's like private plate capital.
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Yeah yo...this is deep asf. I'm kinda still digesting it cause I'm not use to reading anything real AS THIS in the OM
I fucks with this, I'm glad you tagged me so I could see it.
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Actions speak louder than what some hearts perceive... All decisions final
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Lmao
@Not N Nice
... What's that mean? LoL
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@Professor Frost
... Thanks Frost!
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Whatever you want
Sometimes desperation for love distorts judgement
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the narrative of the piece was decent, but it lacked in mechanics, you need to work on your rhyme schemes and smooth out your wording, find your flow... overall, not bad, keep evolving...
...pz
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Cool creative language used here, a few grammar hiccups here and there but I cant knock on the message and content. This was a fresh read, could have had a few things cut here and there but I feel you wrote this like it was a song, not a rap-type thing... Really cool... Let me know if you ever want to learn some cool writing techniques to get in habit of. I know tons, helps a lot!
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The wording was clear. The flow was there. The message? Well, I really have no idea what you were trying to say. You seemed to be pretty conflicted, contradictory, and unsure how you felt about the other person. Perhaps, it was all just a front. I assume it was.
"I hate you, no I love you, fuck you, no I didn't mean it, pfff I better with out you, wait...no I need you."-- that kind of sums up what I got out of this piece.
Typical unstable relationship that consist of a series of game. Both parties afraid of being hurt so the engage in periodic fronts pretending not to like each other as much as they actually do. Or something like that. Nevertheless, it was an entertaining read.
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@Not_N_Nice I just peeped that shit... my desperation for love? I don't think any of my exes would say that, especially after living and leaving 4 out of 5 of them... that's hardly desperate!!! But it's all good LOL