LLL Week 3: Ryno (1-0) vs. Josh S. (1-1) - Open 4 Votes

verses due: Thursday 11:59PST
Minimum Lines = 12 Lines
Maximum Lines = 20 Lines



Extension: Up to opponent IF verse completed & posted/sent. Otherwise at the Moderators discretion.

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Originally Posted by Josh S.

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Shut up.

Yeah u talk a big game homie, just wait until Ry gets a crack atchu
I’ll keep that same energy & give it back twice fold, black panther suit
U run w/ gorillas? Plz ya team full of carnies so I’m raising the shotty
It’s like a date w/ a hottie, I’m expected to leave w/ a cpl animal bodies
U gets no love from me nigga, promise u’ll get slapped like a BITCH
Think Simmons & Embiid, I’ll be posted on ya block talkin trash w/ the 5th
Treat ya sleez w/ dope weave, now she sucks me off hard like a star
I keep her head fly, she keeps her head pressed against my fly in the car
Gun in ya mouth, I never measure myself to these queer challengers
Instead I’ll let the ‘piece open ya jaws up’ like some vernier calipers
Got the knife in the left but this right fist? It could end u so tragic
I’ll ‘switch hands & hit u w/ 3 swipes’ like Han from return of the dragon
Ya bullshit don’t fly here homie, try to run & that heat WILL stop u
I’ll have the sticks moving before you take off like an Aircraft marshal
Ya bitch gets banged out, who hasn’t smashed her box in my hood?
No matter where that frequent, she gave her snatch away as much as she could

...The GOAT

ur into nut hugging & butt touchin'.. gassed up & cant get enough of it
I'm known to split the dutch, you're only known for getting dutch ovened

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...EmUp-Blue-Wins

he's no thug doing hits for cash, ur fully auto couldn't hit me in the belly
last time he got a blue face to shoot he was just shitty with the semi
I got axe to slash, graves need flowers to, I sell em' in a bundle
my magnum opus is guns n roses, pussy, now welcome to the jungle
my coat of arms is loaded, my pedigree is telling me to slam his chest
he grew up ina house with 1 tooth brush aint the same as a family crest
he'll say shit like "before I let the band die, I'll bring the tech in"
this that gore, doe, cop O' era style - he can't even win without a weapon

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-6-3-king-wins

I aint losing to ryno the goat, ur highness has spoke
Me Vs. Kings water under the bridge; Bash em up & died ina moat

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VS. Iontech
ur a pussy behind closed doors, man this guy is a bust
ur the kahwi leonard of text, dawg every shot u take is quiet as fuck

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VS. Bomb bard
Hold up dawg, if ur lackin' in traffic the matic dumpin' it all
Heat check! Release comin' from the side of ya face...Lonzo Ball

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Vs. Blue
2 has beens dick riding, How u ballin’ when ya rhymin’ is poor?
Think NBA halftime, all i see is old niggas that aint got it no more

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ect.. ect..

NBA & gun bars. often he's pulling these; talking in full esteem..
I predict the highlight of ur career will be a Washington bullets scheme
listen sport, tiger, i can't be mad at'cha, it's all pitter patter
i'm sure we'll still be friends after I take yo girl & "whip her snapper"!

Yeah u talk a big game homie, just wait until Ry gets a crack atchu
I’ll keep that same energy & give it back twice fold, black panther suit
Concept is good, I personally hate the young money style execution (I feel it's easy/lazy) but decent opener

U run w/ gorillas? Plz ya team full of carnies so I’m raising the shotty
It’s like a date w/ a hottie, I’m expected to leave w/ a cpl animal bodies
Nah

U gets no love from me nigga, promise u’ll get slapped like a BITCH
Think Simmons & Embiid, I’ll be posted on ya block talkin trash w/ the 5th
Not feeling

Treat ya sleez w/ dope weave, now she sucks me off hard like a star
I keep her head fly, she keeps her head pressed against my fly in the car
OK.. I guess

Gun in ya mouth, I never measure myself to these queer challengers
Instead I’ll let the ‘piece open ya jaws up’ like some vernier calipers
I've used calipers in Aerospace inspection before but this was just OK to me.. I don't like comparison punches with no concept

Got the knife in the left but this right fist? It could end u so tragic
I’ll ‘switch hands & hit u w/ 3 swipes’ like Han from return of the dragon
Another comparison punch, no wit/concept..

Ya bullshit don’t fly here homie, try to run & that heat WILL stop u
I’ll have the sticks moving before you take off like an Aircraft marshal
Comparison punch, no concept..

Ya bitch gets banged out, who hasn’t smashed her box in my hood?
No matter where that frequent, she gave her snatch away as much as she could
I don't even know what you're trying to say here, weak closer.

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ur into nut hugging & butt touchin'.. gassed up & cant get enough of it
I'm known to split the dutch, you're only known for getting dutch ovened
funny but not hard.. decent opener

he's no thug doing hits for cash, ur fully auto couldn't hit me in the belly
last time he got a blue face to shoot he was just shitty with the semi
don't really care for this

I got axe to slash, graves need flowers to, I sell em' in a bundle
my magnum opus is guns n roses, pussy, now welcome to the jungle
ok w/a few tie ins, hard but not hard hitting.. decent

my coat of arms is loaded, my pedigree is telling me to slam his chest
he grew up ina house with 1 tooth brush aint the same as a family crest
man this could have been worded so much better.. half points for the concept, poorly executed

he'll say shit like "before I let the band die, I'll bring the tech in"
this that gore, doe, cop O' era style - he can't even win without a weapon
trying too hard and it doesn't work. And yes I know Tekken so I know what you're going for here..

I aint losing to ryno the goat, ur highness has spoke
Me Vs. Kings water under the bridge; Bash em up & died ina moat
Uh.. no?

NBA & gun bars. often he's pulling these; talking in full esteem..
I predict the highlight of ur career will be a Washington bullets scheme
This could have been done better.. it's kind of creative but not really insulting, which seems to be a theme in this verse

listen sport, tiger, i can't be mad at'cha, it's all pitter patter
i'm sure we'll still be friends after I take yo girl & "whip her snapper"!
absolutely not


This was a tough one to call for me.. Ryno was harder w/more swag but no real concepts.. Josh S. had more creativity yet lacked execution to the point it came across silly instead of hard. I guess I gotta go w/the harder of the two verses because of Ryno's opener.. he clinches this w/just enough creativity to counter his repetitive comparison punches.. and the added swag pushed it in his direction more. I'd really like to see both of you step it up a bit, this is a great season so put that extra effort in and be a bigger part of it.

v/ Ryno

Yeah u talk a big game homie, just wait until Ry gets a crack atchu
I’ll keep that same energy & give it back twice fold, black panther suit
the concept is ok but it has almost no hard hitting connection, the wording is just bleh
U run w/ gorillas? Plz ya team full of carnies so I’m raising the shotty
It’s like a date w/ a hottie, I’m expected to leave w/ a cpl animal bodies
did not enjoy
U gets no love from me nigga, promise u’ll get slapped like a BITCH
Think Simmons & Embiid, I’ll be posted on ya block talkin trash w/ the 5th
just simple self hype
Treat ya sleez w/ dope weave, now she sucks me off hard like a star
I keep her head fly, she keeps her head pressed against my fly in the car
lolz funny but eh
Gun in ya mouth, I never measure myself to these queer challengers
Instead I’ll let the ‘piece open ya jaws up’ like some vernier calipers
alright
Got the knife in the left but this right fist? It could end u so tragic
I’ll ‘switch hands & hit u w/ 3 swipes’ like Han from return of the dragon
dont know the reference but it's so simple i can just assume it works which isn't great
Ya bullshit don’t fly here homie, try to run & that heat WILL stop u
I’ll have the sticks moving before you take off like an Aircraft marshal
lolz i kinda like this
Ya bitch gets banged out, who hasn’t smashed her box in my hood?
No matter where that frequent, she gave her snatch away as much as she could
cool wp this was pretty good, at first i thought the wording was kinda meh but its actually fine

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ur into nut hugging & butt touchin'.. gassed up & cant get enough of it
I'm known to split the dutch, you're only known for getting dutch ovened
lolzzz aight
he's no thug doing hits for cash, ur fully auto couldn't hit me in the belly
last time he got a blue face to shoot he was just shitty with the semi
meh ok
I got axe to slash, graves need flowers to, I sell em' in a bundle
my magnum opus is guns n roses, pussy, now welcome to the jungle
liked it
my coat of arms is loaded, my pedigree is telling me to slam his chest
he grew up ina house with 1 tooth brush aint the same as a family crest
LMFAOOOOO i liked it
he'll say shit like "before I let the band die, I'll bring the tech in"
this that gore, doe, cop O' era style - he can't even win without a weapon
ok
I aint losing to ryno the goat, ur highness has spoke
Me Vs. Kings water under the bridge; Bash em up & died ina moat
i think the concept is really good but the connection was so obv
NBA & gun bars. often he's pulling these; talking in full esteem..
I predict the highlight of ur career will be a Washington bullets scheme
meh pretty weak imo
listen sport, tiger, i can't be mad at'cha, it's all pitter patter
i'm sure we'll still be friends after I take yo girl & "whip her snapper"!
good god this was horrific my man

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Well, there's no way around it, ryno was extreeeeemely simple with his bars, stuff started going better near the end with some cooler concepts and w/p but overall the start of the verse just seemed like some sort of keystyle with some very simple/hype stuff. Josh came rather consistent and had some funny/cool concepts, he clearly knows what he's doing. A few bars I didn't feel but overall a decent verse. Thought Josh took this, wasn't that close imo.

v/ Josh

Yeah u talk a big game homie, just wait until Ry gets a crack atchu
I’ll keep that same energy & give it back twice fold, black panther suit
nice, this was a cool concept & good open
U run w/ gorillas? Plz ya team full of carnies so I’m raising the shotty
It’s like a date w/ a hottie, I’m expected to leave w/ a cpl animal bodies
meh, dont like this one
U gets no love from me nigga, promise u’ll get slapped like a BITCH
Think Simmons & Embiid, I’ll be posted on ya block talkin trash w/ the 5th
sorry man heres good swag to tis but im missing how the 5th ties into the concept
Treat ya sleez w/ dope weave, now she sucks me off hard like a star
I keep her head fly, she keeps her head pressed against my fly in the car
dece... seen a lot of fly concepts over the years so this feels a bit tired
Gun in ya mouth, I never measure myself to these queer challengers
Instead I’ll let the ‘piece open ya jaws up’ like some vernier calipers
cool attack line, solid - not great
Got the knife in the left but this right fist? It could end u so tragic
I’ll ‘switch hands & hit u w/ 3 swipes’ like Han from return of the dragon
cool game concept.. this was worded well
Ya bullshit don’t fly here homie, try to run & that heat WILL stop u
I’ll have the sticks moving before you take off like an Aircraft marshal
nahhhh, seen sticks/airplane/air traffic control shit done before
Ya bitch gets banged out, who hasn’t smashed her box in my hood?
No matter where that frequent, she gave her snatch away as much as she could
hahaha dope... like the simple effective use of the wordplay, funny girl diss punch

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ur into nut hugging & butt touchin'.. gassed up & cant get enough of it
I'm known to split the dutch, you're only known for getting dutch ovened
lol.. decent, its funny
he's no thug doing hits for cash, ur fully auto couldn't hit me in the belly
last time he got a blue face to shoot he was just shitty with the semi
ehhh , the bad multi doesnt help... nah dont lvoe the concept
I got axe to slash, graves need flowers to, I sell em' in a bundle
my magnum opus is guns n roses, pussy, now welcome to the jungle
cool... like the cncept, good swag & this is worded well concetually, punch light tho - prob beter as a s&f bar tbh
my coat of arms is loaded, my pedigree is telling me to slam his chest
he grew up ina house with 1 tooth brush aint the same as a family crest
ehhh, its just corny to me conceptually & the wrding isnt great
he'll say shit like "before I let the band die, I'll bring the tech in"
this that gore, doe, cop O' era style - he can't even win without a weapon
capoera? cap/cop no, i duno this is creative but it just doesnt hit for me
I aint losing to ryno the goat, ur highness has spoke
Me Vs. Kings water under the bridge; Bash em up & died ina moat
nah this is a miss
NBA & gun bars. often he's pulling these; talking in full esteem..
I predict the highlight of ur career will be a Washington bullets scheme
can appreciate the personal attempt here, but this falls flat as its just not overly creative or dope.. very statementy, needed more
listen sport, tiger, i can't be mad at'cha, it's all pitter patter
i'm sure we'll still be friends after I take yo girl & "whip her snapper"!
lol the worplay is cool but the execution here leaves a lot to be desired



Not the best verses ive seen from either... but def have Ryno winning this, his opener and closer were by far my 2 fav lines of the battle, and to me he had more enjoyable concepts with less misses.... props to both

Vote - Ryno

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Originally Posted by Ryno

Shut up.

Yeah u talk a big game homie, just wait until Ry gets a crack atchu
I’ll keep that same energy & give it back twice fold, black panther suit
I usually don't like these types of bars, but this was creative and done well.
U run w/ gorillas? Plz ya team full of carnies so I’m raising the shotty
It’s like a date w/ a hottie, I’m expected to leave w/ a cpl animal bodies
Lol. This is cool
U gets no love from me nigga, promise u’ll get slapped like a BITCH
Think Simmons & Embiid, I’ll be posted on ya block talkin trash w/ the 5th
Don't get this
Treat ya sleez w/ dope weave, now she sucks me off hard like a star
I keep her head fly, she keeps her head pressed against my fly in the car
Ehhh hype bars get no love
Gun in ya mouth, I never measure myself to these queer challengers
Instead I’ll let the ‘piece open ya jaws up’ like some vernier calipers
Don't pretend you didn't just Google this whole bar
Got the knife in the left but this right fist? It could end u so tragic
I’ll ‘switch hands & hit u w/ 3 swipes’ like Han from return of the dragon
Coolish
Ya bullshit don’t fly here homie, try to run & that heat WILL stop u
I’ll have the sticks moving before you take off like an Aircraft marshal
Ehh
Ya bitch gets banged out, who hasn’t smashed her box in my hood?
No matter where that frequent, she gave her snatch away as much as she could
Don't love this.
...The GOAT

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Originally Posted by Josh S.

ur into nut hugging & butt touchin'.. gassed up & cant get enough of it
I'm known to split the dutch, you're only known for getting dutch ovened
Ehh
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...EmUp-Blue-Wins

he's no thug doing hits for cash, ur fully auto couldn't hit me in the belly
last time he got a blue face to shoot he was just shitty with the semi
Nope
I got axe to slash, graves need flowers to, I sell em' in a bundle
my magnum opus is guns n roses, pussy, now welcome to the jungle
Not loving this
my coat of arms is loaded, my pedigree is telling me to slam his chest
he grew up ina house with 1 tooth brush aint the same as a family crest
haha
he'll say shit like "before I let the band die, I'll bring the tech in"
this that gore, doe, cop O' era style - he can't even win without a weapon
Yooo you missed a dope capoera punch here.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-6-3-king-wins

I aint losing to ryno the goat, ur highness has spoke
Me Vs. Kings water under the bridge; Bash em up & died ina moat
Eh






ect.. ect..

NBA & gun bars. often he's pulling these; talking in full esteem..
I predict the highlight of ur career will be a Washington bullets scheme
Haha
listen sport, tiger, i can't be mad at'cha, it's all pitter patter
i'm sure we'll still be friends after I take yo girl & "whip her snapper"!
Not loving this

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Vote: RYNO Josh had some good, fun bars but needs some time. We're in the same boat man, keep at it.

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Originally Posted by Ryno

Yeah u talk a big game homie, just wait until Ry gets a crack atchu
I’ll keep that same energy & give it back twice fold, black panther suit
decent
U run w/ gorillas? Plz ya team full of carnies so I’m raising the shotty
It’s like a date w/ a hottie, I’m expected to leave w/ a cpl animal bodies
eh this misses for me
U gets no love from me nigga, promise u’ll get slapped like a BITCH
Think Simmons & Embiid, I’ll be posted on ya block talkin trash w/ the 5th
ok
Treat ya sleez w/ dope weave, now she sucks me off hard like a star
I keep her head fly, she keeps her head pressed against my fly in the car
lol ok
Gun in ya mouth, I never measure myself to these queer challengers
Instead I’ll let the ‘piece open ya jaws up’ like some vernier calipers
not gonna lie, had to google lol cool bar tho
Got the knife in the left but this right fist? It could end u so tragic
I’ll ‘switch hands & hit u w/ 3 swipes’ like Han from return of the dragon
eh
Ya bullshit don’t fly here homie, try to run & that heat WILL stop u
I’ll have the sticks moving before you take off like an Aircraft marshal
ok
Ya bitch gets banged out, who hasn’t smashed her box in my hood?
No matter where that frequent, she gave her snatch away as much as she could
definitely a used wp but decent flip

...The GOAT
not feeling this one right here

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Originally Posted by Josh S.

ur into nut hugging & butt touchin'.. gassed up & cant get enough of it
I'm known to split the dutch, you're only known for getting dutch ovened
eh not crazy about it
he's no thug doing hits for cash, ur fully auto couldn't hit me in the belly
last time he got a blue face to shoot he was just shitty with the semi
nah
I got axe to slash, graves need flowers to, I sell em' in a bundle
my magnum opus is guns n roses, pussy, now welcome to the jungle
decent jab
my coat of arms is loaded, my pedigree is telling me to slam his chest
he grew up ina house with 1 tooth brush aint the same as a family crest
lol cool
he'll say shit like "before I let the band die, I'll bring the tech in"
this that gore, doe, cop O' era style - he can't even win without a weapon
i like the creative attempt but didnt connect for me
I aint losing to ryno the goat, ur highness has spoke
Me Vs. Kings water under the bridge; Bash em up & died ina moat
i like the idea but u needed to do a little more with it.
NBA & gun bars. often he's pulling these; talking in full esteem..
I predict the highlight of ur career will be a Washington bullets scheme
again, nice idea just not executed harsh enough
listen sport, tiger, i can't be mad at'cha, it's all pitter patter
i'm sure we'll still be friends after I take yo girl & "whip her snapper"!
i lol'd cant front

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cool battle. Josh, from week one to our battle was a big jump. guessing u were just shaking a little rust. ur concepts are pretty dope for the most part, the next thing u should work is being more harsh and direct with the angles u take on them and I think u could rack up some wins. Ryno had some cool bars, not his best verse but consistent enough and harsher execution.


vote Ryno

panther was aight, cool
animal bodies was a miss
embiid was light
fly was okay
had to google calipiers, not crazy ab it
han was decent.. light
aircraft was good, liked that shit
freak went was solid wp

vs

opener was ok, light
blueface wasnt feelin
guns & roses was cool but more like a swag bar
even tho family crest came off a lil corny i liked it alot
wasnt feelin capoeira
most was ok
bullets is played n the second one ive seen fairly recently
closer was funny

surprised me here, last 2 lines took it for ry th0

5-1