12 lines, due by midnight tonight.
House rules
Good luck.Quote:
Originally Posted by Sinning
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12 lines, due by midnight tonight.
House rules
Good luck.Quote:
Originally Posted by Sinning
I'm so dope, I'm a cocaine dealer; I'll have the Narc Shook; you'll get burnt with a serpent's hell's flame like czar books
I'll have you in checkmate on a checkerboard like lost rooks; I'll have 'Net Swimming with the Fishes' for trying to make this a w(rap) without sharp hooks
My Beretta is reckless; I'm ready and hectic; try to cross me, and I'll have my double cross etched on a necklace
I'm better with methods; you're not even special; when is 'worthless worth more than a Djinn' when he's not getting molested
You're sleeping on the concrete; while I'm sleeping on a flat pillow; I'm a seer; and you couldn't 'smell good' if I axed willow
My Hell's Flame will SMoke verything that this brat billows; you'll sea the light; I have the book of life for this 'Death Note bitch as I play a Black Chello
I'lll appease your life; I'll slice you with a measly knife; you're not sick; that's the measles; SIKE!
I'm a beast with rhymes; I'll seer your eyes with a seering strike; then dump you in the Hosea for trying to be Jesus Christ!
I'm surround this pussy cats mistress! Black sentence; repentance sedative methods reliishness double helix; trouble Felix; subtle T Kid
Bubble sea dip; trouble sea sip; singular tongue crush your double helix if you try to walk on water I'll drown you in your baptism!
I surround wisdom; schism of hollow men; visiting swallow ships; Ramses with the pen I'll throw you in the sand pit with blacketh
you act shit like cat nip rap sick rap sick practice rapping with in tune elleciactics for I'll talk to your god and you'll never have the wisdom of solomon
Mmm..
Sinny ho love to salad, but I don't buy twat from the fat whore
Let all my niggas cum in the front, n she lettuce leaf out the back door!
U sinnin talkin bout Djinn, kid that shit old and doneQuote:
Originally Posted by Sinning
But after I Pop you... won't have a mouth left to put your Golden Sun.
When the polls thru, i'll have my foot up on his throat here maybe
If MI last ballot is proof, it's cool to smoke herbs like bro on a daily.
On Rb tryna grow, but at the crib movin in stealth
My fists'll make this man cave, then he can have room for himself!
U gettin respect here/ rappin like that, dont go together
But fuck how it look, let me commit to Sin.... Said No One Ever!
Swear i wont even waste my damn time formulatin this last rhyme
This Ho be(hobby) a future representation.. of what I do in my past time!
Good verse, this is ready for votes. Good battle. Solid votes necessary.
May we get some votes, for the flower girl. Would be quite grateful. Thank you.
Networth:
Opener- i fuck w the concept and the wording. But all your wordplay is forced to the high heavens. Too forced to let u slide on it
Golden sun- this was aight
Smoke- decent current event line. Pretty predictable tho.
Man cave- lmao i fk w this
No one ever- wack
Closer- nah trash. U gotta stay away from these forced ass wordplays bro.
Vs
Sinning:
Listen man. U got good ideas. But ur lines are too long. U got 2bars each bar. Separate ur shit. Just stick to:
1 concept
1 set up
1 punchline per bar and u'll be good.
Vote networth
Golden sun, MI (ironic asf cause I'm from Michigan lol), man cave
Vs
N/A
Not trying to be a dick but Sinning has a lot of ideas but he's not wording or executing them properly. Over wording. Shorten it up all like Grimm did but.
V. networth
@Networth That man cave line was dope. MI flip was okay. Opening bar was pretty bad. Almost cringe-worthy. All in all it was kind of a hit or miss verse. You definitely have potential though. Just got to work on that execution and try to be more consistent. Still you did enough to take this easy.
@Sinning I'm getting really tired if giving you the same feed. These stretched lines full of heavily-slanted, mythology-themed rhyme schemes and no punches. You are not going to win battles unless you find creative ways to attack.
Vote - Net worth
A stretched out story wit multis
Vs
Salad
Man cave
Commit to sin
1 sided battle to me
V- net
Networth
Sinny ho love to salad, but I don't buy twat from the fat whore
Let all my niggas cum in the front, n she lettuce leaf out the back door!
^^OK. I see the wordplay
U sinnin talkin bout Djinn, kid that shit old and done
But after I Pop you... won't have a mouth left to put your Golden Sun.
^^Not sure about this...
When the polls thru, i'll have my foot up on his throat here maybe
If MI last ballot is proof, it's cool to smoke herbs like bro on a daily.
^^No sir
On Rb tryna grow, but at the crib movin in stealth
My fists'll make this man cave, then he can have room for himself!
^^Pretty decent. Not really a diss, more like self-hype
U gettin respect here/ rappin like that, dont go together
But fuck how it look, let me commit to Sin.... Said No One Ever!
^^Yeah!
Swear i wont even waste my damn time formulatin this last rhyme
This Ho be(hobby) a future representation.. of what I do in my past time!
^^Forced wordplay, IMO. Not a fan of fancy wordplay for little to no reason
@Sinning ... with all due respect, your entire verse was a dumpster fire. VOTE = NETWORTH