What do we have here? Realizing you're out of ammo is only a click away.

Introducing impending doom. The illest usage of killing tools since
living proof of splitting nuclei. fission boom in the city with shrooms.
Sensing truth, this instance alludes to the invention of nukes.
Face it, kid.. When I kick it, your expression radiates shins, and your missing a tooth

I'm saying give 'em the boot..
I'm gonna plant 'em they'll get ripped from the root.
All bark with a rocket, always the same shit like a scripted Groot..
That wood suit for a misfit group pimping tunes that we don't listen to.

I raise an eyebrow to these lames in my town selling them cookies
Giving 'em more Ls than when the rock smells what hes cooking
If you question I'm shook in here guessing I wouldn't,
I'll melt you to mush you can tell from the puddin'

Maybe I'm stunting. Daring the devils who read me wrong.
I'll blind drop with all of my shots and hit every head involved
Sorry to say I know you'll cave man, a tunnel say you're less evolved
And best of all I got a rod of steel with naked ladies on 'em cumming in like a wrecking ball

I know pimping like the back of my hand
So play the dick riding bitch and get smacked where you stand
I get the honey like pooh then bounce like tigger laughing and grand
Christopher Robin William's I'm killing all you characters with the master plan.





First battle format I've done in years and since (hopefully) I have battles coming up feedback greatly appreciated and I will trade for feed or vote in battle (not in your favor unless it's actually my honest opinion of course).

Groot line was funny. Ya u got some concepts and skill. Battles will be up probably tomorrow night

You have just made my day and probably ruined someone else's. Thanks for hearing me out and giving me a shot.

shit sux

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fucking garbage. you sound like a fed. and you're message is dumb as fuck. stop rapping you're wack af. you rapped about winnie the pooh dude. wtf. groot? you go from landing every headshot involved or whatever bullshit it sounds and looks like you ain't never did, to fucking winnie christopher robin bro. wtf is a shin expression.

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you're inducing yourself with lube about impending doom, you'll die too soon. quietly murdered by the ten foot pole.
you live in the womb, screwed, now die in woven looms like sheep in sleep's gloom. i heard murmurs about the soul.
try knitting while you're sitting in deep shade, count up dandelions and daffodils, you pansy. go dig six feet holes.
you can start quitting while i switch my hands fast like the long lead i give you, handicap, calligraphy, and fancy free.
i can tell your skin lacks the melanin, no funk, you ain't got the spark, your head is foaming white though, in the dark.
i'll pour out your pants pockets while i estimate your chances. bang you like the back board at the park. pass it to me.

I have an open callout in the FL section if you want to battle. Post there or I don't care.

Since FL seems a little dead and you wouldn't do it anyway.

Nobody mentioned lube but you you friggin tool
Always got dick on the brain because yours is miniscule
I can respect that death is hard to accept when I'm killin' you
I'm the man for job, you job for the man with no inner view
You rock fake, watch.. you ticked, and tock is cheap
Gonna realize like "oh, Shiiinn" after you lost to C.
You wanna play, word. But first, learn word play.
Learn how to curve phrases at least, your terms basic
A drastic lack in multis resulting in tragic action
My stash is packed for bullies who sully, I slash like fractions
In your mind is hell, that's fine and well, in mine is heaven
Cause after this battle cracked its crash on top like 9 11

Go fuck yourself

I thought it was good and I laughed at some lines with a relation that was non related - If there are leagues coming I wanna join - let me know. ... PS I already knew the feds got on here too YEARS ago!

Some good concepts, but I felt the approach was a tad vague. Try to incorporate more adjectives to draw the reader into a more compelling story. Not a bad read just a few kinks to work on from being simplistic to relevant.

Just to clarify, this isn't intended as a song. More like a battle against noone. I do appreciate the feedback. Thanks

i don't think i'm gonna read what you said i lost interest in it. but ayo i'm chillin here, not knowing what cares are.

still earn band lumps before the yard fills bad dumps.
killed by a scar every earth man counted mad dumb.
that's real junky trunks bet your wheel's a fun trumpet.
steel pump steals heart like a bum wit. drunk uncle.
munching muffin tops and dunk off crunk like brando.
battleship, i sunk it, the cruise carrier is under funded.
you swear by word you stick to the bible, all of the lies.
i'm liable. but i ain't on fire like a rifle with big guys.
can crooked lean good and clean with hood rambo?
no, why? let me tell ya, the meanest, son, fuck team.
creme ain't moving movement to just doing fluent fluids.
music camo, too dipped, since two, knew i'd lose it.
winning, pinning, grinning, i love singing, just thinking.
kiddo ain't saying jambo, i'm the nicest eyes winking.
sweep away beats because boredom kinged him.
sweet mystery, sickest sticker wick fixed income.

Look who's back. The guy who'll write bars all day but not in a battle setting.
Chyll Tyrant
Join date 2006
Post count 46

What a dipshit. "I ain't reading the blah blah"
Well I read yours. Decent flow, I like the vocab choices.

But see, unlike you, I'm here for elevation.
You're here to avoid battles and talk shit that's L evasion.

i've had choices and i've heard voices, telling me what to do. and if i had listened, i would be just like you.
dudes avoided the L's and now refill on poisons. i ate the avocado dip and took a big shit, microchip destroyer.
i don't know elevation, except throw my shoes out the top proj window to the highest wires for battle writers.
i'm too old to evade your taxes, but that's how you know i prove ego to wisenheimer. crash cars on budweiser.

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penpals from the heart. my website chylltyrant.wixsite.com/nucrux just give me some a little feedback, tell me what did i do wrong? with the website... how did i go so far and yet so wrong, like cheryl d. wong?
d wong?? wow like a holyman battle? waaaavy.

And you say my shit is garbage.
Yet you're still here baiting me wanting more.
Set up a battle if you're so eager.
Otherwise like a earth-dwelling mammal shaman - gopher cure self

Your approach on this was pretty basic. From the jump I could already predict the angles you were setting g up easily. Nothing bad but you gotta add some deep thought or some juice to keep it well rooted to follow through for the next scenario. The problem with this is you wrote it with no substance. Let me say this if you take time out of your day that very moment to key some shit then make it worth it. Keep ya head up and you got the concepts you seem to have the flow acapella more so... but now you need the glue. The story and concept to stick with creativity flare and wording to make for smooth transitions from bar to bar

Thanks for the advice.