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@Joe Boston @DamOhOhOh
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He cant outrun the speed of these hollows hes not built with the endurance
So ill put one through this Manchester see an explosion worse than an Ariana Performance
Your appearance here has no importance
I'll off u quick and dispose the body
You'll see visions of light in an orb form quicker than a Trump visit to Saudi
His bars are oddly constructed those trash verses have their own assigned bucket
Runs around and claims hes the shit, id be surprised if he witnessed his first Golden Nugget
I'll smash your broad in public put her on display and watch u panic
After i bust all over her Jo No Se nothing just fucked her like a Hispanic
Your relationships are a sunken Titanic those heartstrings have broken chords
Soft faggot! Hopes his Heart will go on 20 yrs later like Celine at the Billboard Awards
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Joe will buckle under the weight, I will knock of his head when it's screwed on straight
His a monument to bad taste, I love music but he makes me want a more quiet space
I am giving you the silent treatment, joe seems like his the type who goes back on an agreement
A major inconvenience like all his life timE achievements this will be an unfortunate turn of events
It's hard to imagine, this fake g.i joe being a man of action
With a heated passion, I can't help but Burst out laughing,
his wearing last years fashion, would your mother approve?
I don't think so, If I told her this would turn into a family feud
One simple background check, shows that you're a son of a bitch
And have a character defect, you would make number one on the top ten retarded list
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Originally Posted by Joe Boston
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Originally Posted by DamOhOhOh
Joe took this rather easily. His misses were better than anything in Dam's verse, plus he had a couple solid bars. Dam could improve by using punchlines at least once or twice in a verse.
v-Joe
He cant outrun the speed of these hollows hes not built with the endurance
So ill put one through this Manchester see an explosion worse than an Ariana Performance
Nice bar
Your appearance here has no importance
I'll off u quick and dispose the body
You'll see visions of light in an orb form quicker than a Trump visit to Saudi
okish
His bars are oddly constructed those trash verses have their own assigned bucket
Runs around and claims hes the shit, id be surprised if he witnessed his first Golden Nugget
Not bad
I'll smash your broad in public put her on display and watch u panic
After i bust all over her Jo No Se nothing just fucked her like a Hispanic
wording a bit fucked here lol fucked her like a Hispanic? not sure how that makes sense
Your relationships are a sunken Titanic those heartstrings have broken chords
Soft faggot! Hopes his Heart will go on 20 yrs later like Celine at the Billboard Awards
good ender
vs.
Joe will buckle under the weight, I will knock of his head when it's screwed on straight
His a monument to bad taste, I love music but he makes me want a more quiet space
ok
I am giving you the silent treatment, joe seems like his the type who goes back on an agreement
A major inconvenience like all his life timE achievements this will be an unfortunate turn of events
like the multis you construct, but try to form punches bro
It's hard to imagine, this fake g.i joe being a man of action
With a heated passion, I can't help but Burst out laughing,
not a punch
his wearing last years fashion, would your mother approve?
I don't think so, If I told her this would turn into a family feud
could've did something better with this bar
One simple background check, shows that you're a son of a bitch
And have a character defect, you would make number one on the top ten retarded list
could've done something with this bar too
DamOh you got the right idea but you gotta work on throwing in some punches. This is a good start for you I believe. Keep battling, take the feedback you get in to consideration and find a style that works for you. I think you could do better if you just work on your text battling skills and hit with punchlines. You know how to construct your bars well so that's good. Joe, you played no games here obviously lol. Your opening bar was good, I have a feeling we'll see more variations of that bar. I actually just did one myself. So many ways to erupt that and I like how you constructed that bar. You had a few misses but overall your misses didn't really hurt your chances here. Good battle.
v/ Joe Boston
JB
He cant outrun the speed of these hollows hes not built with the endurance
So ill put one through this Manchester see an explosion worse than an Ariana Performance
Ok bar overall^
Your appearance here has no importance
I'll off u quick and dispose the body
You'll see visions of light in an orb form quicker than a Trump visit to Saudi
Forced rhyme but decent hit^
His bars are oddly constructed those trash verses have their own assigned bucket
Runs around and claims hes the shit, id be surprised if he witnessed his first Golden Nugget
Nah..
I'll smash your broad in public put her on display and watch u panic
After i bust all over her Jo No Se nothing just fucked her like a Hispanic
Decent..
Your relationships are a sunken Titanic those heartstrings have broken chords
Soft faggot! Hopes his Heart will go on 20 yrs later like Celine at the Billboard Awards
Meh...
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DOh
Joe will buckle under the weight, I will knock of his head when it's screwed on straight
His a monument to bad taste, I love music but he makes me want a more quiet space
Ok, poor setup for the punch^
I am giving you the silent treatment, joe seems like his the type who goes back on an agreement
A major inconvenience like all his life timE achievements this will be an unfortunate turn of events
Nice rhyme, decent punch, sub par setup^
It's hard to imagine, this fake g.i joe being a man of action
With a heated passion, I can't help but Burst out laughing,
Haha.. Not really punching tho..^
his wearing last years fashion, would your mother approve?
I don't think so, If I told her this would turn into a family feud
Too short barred, no punch here but decent attempt...^
One simple background check, shows that you're a son of a bitch
And have a character defect, you would make number one on the top ten retarded list
Setup could've made for a good punch, but the delivery missed, poor close here.
So yea, I feel this was one sided overall. Joe dropped a more polished battle verse, albeit missing in many spots, while Dam seemed to rush his work, whereas it came off as more of a quick keyed verse with many more missed attempts.
V/Joe this time.
I'll off u quick and dispose the body
You'll see visions of light in an orb form quicker than a Trump visit to Saudi
Your relationships are a sunken Titanic those heartstrings have broken chords
Soft faggot! Hopes his Heart will go on 20 yrs later like Celine at the Billboard Awards
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nothin
joe dropped decent was more than enough... Dam check out some old text battles or even newer ones to get more of a feel of how to write... stick around elevate little by little...
vote Joe for the more polished verse.