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My Last Letters
Dear Mum
I used to hate you, but now I relate to
Everythin you had to go through
Growin up in the inner city
I wanna know, are you gonna miss me?
Cos when you walked out, I left
Instigator came in; you made us live off
No money, sellin the silverware off the hearth
Tryna get enough to last us until you came home
But you were 3 months, you were smoking chron’
Tryna tell me to not do drugs ‘that shit addictive’
And you tried to stop me listenin to rap n shit
Well…listen to this, I’m sorry…
Dear Dad
You barely know me, but you always in my business
But you never knew the truth, well, guess what, here this
When the house burned down, that was me, I started it
I’d took some acid tabs I found in your coat pocket
I got addicted to that sick shit, my life, you lost it
You never had a chance to really know me
When I was born, you were in a different country
When we were burgled, you were out dealin shit
You always said that you owned a Ford dealership
But we knew that you were gonna give them the keys
And the security code, so they could put a knife to her throat
That’s why mum left, don’t think I ain’t know what she wrote
Dear Michael
This is the last twelve lines of my life
We never got on, but that’s your fault
When you read this, put your life on halt
Cos word, I’m gonna do some Kurt Kobain shit
Have my brains spread all across the walls
Tell Cara and Janine, they caused war
Between me and Instigator
So bad that I gonna be on a respirator
I hope that you can relate ta
What I been through with them
But now I gotta do it, my fingers on the trigger
I was proud of you; I hope your life can be bigger
[Gunshot]
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deep shit i like this tho u did it bout ur mom and dad and i think ur bro im guessing
i give this
7.5 outta 10
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Yeah nice stuff, doing good PoEtic stuff round here, ayo keep the shit poppin'
7.5999995599/10.........nah trippin. tis good keep it going dog
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plenty of emotion in this piece.. some rhymes got a bit basic and predictable.. so could do with a lil more all round complexity... flow was more like poetic rythm if anything.. had some nicely worded phrases throughout, so worked well as a str8 forward song.. should work as an audio or the likes of...
could maybe try throw in a couple of mettas next time fosho
check this joint if you can b bothered
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=266770
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thnx, i'll hit tht up in a few hours
uppin
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liek this alot, nice and deep, good shit man, keep it up
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emotion was definately here man..nice topic...real deep..
good rhymes...pretty good vocab..complexity was good as well
flow was smooth..strucutre was even..made it an easy read..
overall this was enjoyable to read..keep it up man..peace
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Drop was gd shit
Flow not bad
Structure improvin
Rhymth kk
keep@it
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no good imagary wordplay N' structure could of been better.....elavate N' get more creative
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yeah man
i liked it a lot
its got a bag full of emotions in to it
kinda reminds me of "cleaning out my closet"
da only problem i had with it is the flow
its kinda slow then fast the medium
it flows like a poem
but still its good shit man
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thnx for the feed
leave links and ill comment on ur drops
uppin
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Re: My Last Letters
All your last letters here are quite useful for me and I will share these letters with my mates who are going to write my essay online now. That would be the best thing for me and all my mates who I will share this with.