Eminem through the ages (part 2)

RELAPSE (age 36)
I waited and watched
while I masturbated my cock
while the concept of rapin' a twat
pervaded my thoughts
invaded the place and I brought
a blade that's serrated to chop
her face and her fake tits off
and I baked it and ate it to stop
my craving for lady parts
cause' when Shady starts
contemplating his unsavory arts
he gets a bit crazy, dark
he takes three hearts
up out the rib cage of infant babies, carved
up and mangled like Shady's an angry shark
so take heed of these insane remarks

RECOVERY ( age 37)
I'm not afraid, I'm not afraid
to sing with popstars, to sing with popstars
to get paid, to get paid
but still drop some hot bars...

we'll walk this road together, through the haze
and we'll dive headlong into the maze
that is my brainwaves
and I will lead you, show you how to change your life and get saved

you can try to predict my flow
before I spit my flow
but you will never eclipse my flow
you're barely hip high, woah
I quit my blow
and saw my dick size grow
like six times, so
stop doin' that shit, my bro

MMLP2 (age 40)
Asooma dooma
hooma booma
who the
futa
can do what I do ta
exude a
aura this huge ya
would have to have to project your voice through a
korrelian tuba
you a
losa
zabooma-foo-pre-pare
to lose a tuba lube up
in your poopshoot, once
I screw ya

REVIVAL (age 44)
Donald Trump fucking sucks
he's a racist fucking cunt
he wants to let the cops beat black people up
cause' he's such

a massive fucking dick with ears
that's my new reason to be pissed this year

KAMIKAZE (age 45)
when a... new Eminem rap... drops
drama, unfolds like a lap...top
that's not
what, I'd call a bad start
back off
fore' you get slapped twat

everyone hates revival cause' I didn't mumble or use autotune
so I'm bringin' Shady back on you bitches, and you'll just be like "damn, I didn't think he would drop so soon"

Again, biased. I feel you on Revival man but Kamikaze has been good to me. Fav part of this piece was the MMLP2, the creativity that went into this is awesome. Inspiring even. Your relapse was better thought out than the rest of it, def seems to be the more polished paragraph. Your recovery coulda used a little more but it got the point across.

Overall feed from both part 1 & 2, I think you shoulda put more into the ones you weren't particularly a fan of. If you're gonna do something do it all the way right? That's how we push our creative abilities. You've for sure pushed me to have more fun with what I'm writing and not get too serious about the concepts. Reminded me what it's like to have fun with a piece. Look forward to seeing more