WK16: AeeYo (0-1) vs Cred (0-1) AeeYo Wins by NS

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@AeeYo @Cred

Check.

How many lines are you down with, Cred?

Cash

Come get it...

ur Willis weak and u Arnold that great... ur last drop's a shitty joke
Jit raped u behind his bars... and was given u Different Strokes
so i'ma eat the shit outta ya Wrap, i was amp'd Taco bars with ease
and Sauce this bitch pronto... pump that heat into his Supreme
i'm in ur pocket, nigga, all bets off, ur leave'n here wit nuthin
er'day u look more like a newb, shoulda kept ya Benjamins Buttoned
Wet ur fam up, drown 'em in the Gene Pool... and after the set up
i'll have ya girl's shit Lien'n, after i fuk'd her damn Cred up
my ferosity got this dude stiff, i'm Dragon this Mexican newb, nigs
he might go Bite some used spit... if i wasn't punch'n him Toothless
so u gonna learn nigga, roll ur Blunt... i'm officially start'n class
while u in that Geography, i'm squeeze'n two... put Philly on the Map
now how the hell u gonna beat me... that Jit verse? Now come on, dude
then u got the nerve to show an avatar of ur dumb ass try'n to look cool
snatch them Dead Presidents from ur fuk'n head, and i'll give 'em proof
post this Lincoln next week's mag... "Once Again, Cred Murdered In A Booth"


RESPECT.

@Cred drop something

ur Willis weak and u Arnold that great... ur last drop's a shitty joke
Jit raped u behind his bars... and was given u Different Strokes
im over here in my squad car repeating the word Arnold, trying to decipher the hidden wordplay within...but I’m not having any success....not a fan of this line
so i'ma eat the shit outta ya Wrap, i was amp'd Taco bars with ease
and Sauce this bitch pronto... pump that heat into his Supreme
PAUSE.
i'm in ur pocket, nigga, all bets off, ur leave'n here wit nuthin
er'day u look more like a newb, shoulda kept ya Benjamins Buttoned
i like the concept here but this woulda been better if you hadn’t compared newb with Benjamin button, I’m sure there are other things you could say lol
Wet ur fam up, drown 'em in the Gene Pool... and after the set up
i'll have ya girl's shit Lien'n, after i fuk'd her damn Cred up
what?
my ferosity got this dude stiff, i'm Dragon this Mexican newb, nigs
he might go Bite some used spit... if i wasn't punch'n him Toothless
bite some used spit.....boy if you don’t!!!!
so u gonna learn nigga, roll ur Blunt... i'm officially start'n class
while u in that Geography, i'm squeeze'n two... put Philly on the Map
i think this could’ve been good with better wording
now how the hell u gonna beat me... that Jit verse? Now come on, dude
then u got the nerve to show an avatar of ur dumb ass try'n to look cool
nah
snatch them Dead Presidents from ur fuk'n head, and i'll give 'em proof
post this Lincoln next week's mag... "Once Again, Cred Murdered In A Booth"
alright decent closer here


Ok so I’m prettty sure I’ve read some of your verses before and I thought you were pretty decent, but now I’m not so sure after reading this one. Most of your lines are either too basic or too wordy, I say you need to brainstorm better concepts that you’ve never seen before. You definitely have potential and I respect you because you’re active and you vote, and we definitely need that. Also, don’t be afraid to take a chance on trying out other styles, the goal is to experiment as much as you need to until you read your shit and say to yourself “damn that’s fire for sure”. There’s no way you looked at this verse and said to yourself “sheesh these bars are hot, let me post!”. Like I said, you have potential to be great and I don’t tell that to everyone, only to few people tbh. My advice? Make an alias where you don’t care about the battle record and try out new things on it. We don’t have to know it’s you who’s hiding behind that alias, you get to elevate at your own pace and see what works for you and what doesn’t. Also, go battle on Netcees man I’m serious. You will get a lot better in no time, if you don’t wanna battle there then at least view some battles from recent years and get an idea of what is accepted as dope and what isn’t. Throw all wordplay out the window unless it’s absolutely hands down fiery dopeness, there’s no room for basic wordplay. Look, I’m even willing to take you in as my student and personally help you to become great. Like I said, you already have my respect because you’re all for the betterment of text battling and you’re active. I post bullshit bars on here because it’s hard to find motivation on here, all my good stuff is on Netcees and I’ll show it to you and break it down on how to transition your style and mold it into perfection. Hell, I’ll even sign into the playoffs and win the whole thing if it’ll make you happy, just let me know if you want that to happen. Good luck man but this verse was ass lmao

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Originally Posted by AeeYo

Come get it...

ur Willis weak and u Arnold that great... ur last drop's a shitty joke
Jit raped u behind his bars... and was given u Different Strokes
...nah
so i'ma eat the shit outta ya Wrap, i was amp'd Taco bars with ease
and Sauce this bitch pronto... pump that heat into his Supreme
...nah
i'm in ur pocket, nigga, all bets off, ur leave'n here wit nuthin
er'day u look more like a newb, shoulda kept ya Benjamins Buttoned
...lol
Wet ur fam up, drown 'em in the Gene Pool... and after the set up
i'll have ya girl's shit Lien'n, after i fuk'd her damn Cred up
...no sir
my ferosity got this dude stiff, i'm Dragon this Mexican newb, nigs
he might go Bite some used spit... if i wasn't punch'n him Toothless
...nah
so u gonna learn nigga, roll ur Blunt... i'm officially start'n class
while u in that Geography, i'm squeeze'n two... put Philly on the Map
...nah
now how the hell u gonna beat me... that Jit verse? Now come on, dude
then u got the nerve to show an avatar of ur dumb ass try'n to look cool
...no sir
snatch them Dead Presidents from ur fuk'n head, and i'll give 'em proof
post this Lincoln next week's mag... "Once Again, Cred Murdered In A Booth"
...lol


RESPECT.

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A bunch of tie ins doesnt make the bar hit harder. Conceptually some of these either didnt have sting or were kind of reaching to work. Like i told HT, if u say any of these bars in person to somebody would there be a "DAMN" or "OOOO" factor? Nah, not really. Your not just dropping for yourself, your dropping to impress the voters. G/L