Week 4: A Disciple (1-2) vs MoFo (0-0) AD Wins by NS
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Re: Week 4: A Disciple (1-2) vs MoFo (0-0)
Re: Week 4: A Disciple (1-2) vs MoFo (0-0)
Mofo you a player? You took an oath for life?
I'll mark you in the dark while you fucking your wife
What you know of target, dodging and ducking
Bet you stay with your coop just running and clucking
Ever see a full circle spin back around
Ever see a trace lost to be found - young boy
3 shots near missed my vagina
You better cop a vest before we coming behind ya
Taking all names - put your alibi to the side
Cause if we come to, to run thru and it's true
It's going to be your suicide
(at least that's what the coroner gonna report)
Re: Week 4: A Disciple (1-2) vs MoFo (0-0)
Re: Week 4: A Disciple (1-2) vs MoFo (0-0) OPEN FOR FEED
Mofo you a player? You took an oath for life?
I'll mark you in the dark while you fucking your wife
^meh.. shouldve set this up a little better and/or attacked much harder
What you know of target, dodging and ducking
Bet you stay with your coop just running and clucking
^nah..altho i see where u were going this had no sting and felt almost childish
Ever see a full circle spin back around
Ever see a trace lost to be found - young boy
^U talkin to em now.. this would be kinda tight in audio but it doesn't evoke even a second though in text
3 shots near missed my vagina
You better cop a vest before we coming behind ya
Taking all names - put your alibi to the side
Cause if we come to, to run thru and it's true
It's going to be your suicide
^Thes lines lacked structure and 'side' was repetitive to a fault, that lessened the effect of this punch
So yea, I definitely see you improving in strides.. just continue to read up on whatever texts you like on the site and potentially emulate whichever wordplay,nameplay, personal and current angles you like. and although its best to keep your own style, you may wanna loo into altering it to fit the text format a bit more, even tho it's clear that from the beginning to now, you have already. So, keep up the work AD..and soon, I'm sure, it will be considered good work. Good effort tho Sis.