5 bars I guess because no one seems to want to do much more than that.
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5 bars I guess because no one seems to want to do much more than that.
GrimmZReaper?/ more like flimsy queefer/
you're simply weak/ you're a wimpy creature/ with a mini-weiner/ and dim demeanor/
You said you don't like my multis/ so I guess I need to let them all free/ in the aether/
till' they dissipate/ like Zyklon-B/ vapours/ not allowing Grimm to breath for/
under-estimat/ing me and my pipe-bomb-heat-masers/ that give you tenth degree burns/
(Just in case you're too stupid to know what a maser is, it stands for Microwave Amplification by Stimulated Emission of Radiation)
(Also Zyklon-B is a transition rhyme from "multis" and "all free" in case you didn't catch that)
2lines=1 Bar
Line 1
Line 2
Is a bar^^
You need more bars
Alright, I'll fix it up soon. You are basically giving me permission to kick his ass even worse.Quote:
Originally Posted by Kill Spree
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Originally Posted by Fact Machine
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Originally Posted by Kill Spree
sooo, u tried to appear smart but couldn't comprehend counting bars in a battle YOU set ....that's more pathetic than ironic.... i'll post something when I feel like it since u were also too stupid to set up a due date or time
I actually did count it, it's just hard to tell because of all the rhymes inside of rhymes inside of alpaca's butt holes inside of rhymes. But if kill spree wants me to add more I won't complain.Quote:
Originally Posted by GrimmZReaper
GrimmZReaper?/ more like flimsy queefer/
you're simply weak/ you're a wimpy creature/ with a mini-weiner/ and dim demeanor/
You said you don't like my multis/ so I guess I need to let them all free/ in the aether/
till' they dissipate/ like Zyklon-B/ vapours/ not allowing Grimm to breath for/
under-estimat/ing/ me and my pipe-bomb-heat-masers/ that give you tenth degree burns/
I'm a human intestine-baking/ white zombie flavor/ing human flesh with alien entity curds/
my father is insanity, my mom, she's anger/ I'm a python, three acres/ long, tree strangler/
your rhymes are potty flavour/ Fact's odd, he's stranger/ than a volley of mach three waifers/
made of toffee, and coffee cake you're/ probly a cockmeat taster/
it's obvious you want me, hater/ you'd probably suck on me wanker/
@GrimmZReaper
You have 48Hrs to prove a verse or you're getting the DQ L
THanks
:boxing:Quote:
Originally Posted by Kill Spree
i'll drop by end of tomorrow,, I might be going to a Smack rapbattle event in Raleigh, but Saturday by midniteQuote:
Originally Posted by Kill Spree
since he didnt state due date tonight mid night is final...you no show your getting the L and a Duck awardQuote:
Originally Posted by GrimmZReaper
I'll clean this thread up as soon as you drop
Grimm vs a machine that cant count ...
:laugh::laugh:
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Originally Posted by Fact Machine
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Originally Posted by Fact Machine
Your infatuation with dicks is awfully awkward, we all joke but YOU take it to newer fag degrees
Search these threads for gayest bars and all u getting is “FACT’S!!!”....like when a new york cat agrees
Against Bomb’ard u got floored with plain punches, but I got something up my sleeve for this square
These fists the wright bros, cause they goin be the first known for putting a machine in the air
The last guy ducked, using probation as an excuse, so ur a last minute fill-in…at any rate youngin’
Fact machine? Nah, Dog’s a bounty hunter…only reason youre even here is cause an Inmate’s Running :facepalm:
Grimm disembowels chumps, have u eating through tubes and straws from the trigger hand
Im no psychic… but when this bout is through, u and solid food goin’ cancel all future dinner plans
That format you use just shows your simple minded, but it explains your process ‘o thought management
U chose that style in a pathetic attempt to lash out at those who never called u multi talented….
fact machine - no real disses, clever wordplays or strong flow to the read. The multis are cool when you can flow them better. You had some attempts at metaphors and concepts, like odd, stranger, or line about tree strangler which made sense but isnt a diss on your opponent. You might consider switching up the writing style, to make it easier to read when competing in text battles. In audio or freestyle or video it's not as bad but the way this is written fucks up the reader and even if you did have some cool content, you need better aimed disses and more intellectually structured bars using some more creative wordplay.
grim - like the closer with the multi play - other lines were a bot more basic like dinner plans but it wasnt bad, i liked the wright brothers bar nameplay. Not a bad verse after reading a bunch of garbage today im glad i stopped in here and saw a verse with potential.
vote - grim. better disses and more creative attack that made more sense as far a punchlines go.
Facts
GrimmZReaper?/ more like flimsy queefer/
you're simply weak/ you're a wimpy creature/ with a mini-weiner/ and dim demeanor/
You said you don't like my multis/ so I guess I need to let them all free/ in the aether/
till' they dissipate/ like Zyklon-B/ vapours/ not allowing Grimm to breath for/
under-estimat/ing/ me and my pipe-bomb-heat-masers/ that give you tenth degree burns/
I'm a human intestine-baking/ white zombie flavor/ing human flesh with alien entity curds/
my father is insanity, my mom, she's anger/ I'm a python, three acres/ long, tree strangler/
your rhymes are potty flavour/ Fact's odd, he's stranger/ than a volley of mach three waifers/
made of toffee, and coffee cake you're/ probly a cockmeat taster/
it's obvious you want me, hater/ you'd probably suck on me wanker/
these bars to me tbh didn't come off as text formulated punches. the whole structure to me came off as an audio battle vibe. the multis were cool but there was really no creativity behind the concepts and just a bunch of filler.
Grimm
Your infatuation with dicks is awfully awkward, we all joke but YOU take it to newer fag degrees
Search these threads for gayest bars and all u getting is “FACT’S!!!”....like when a new york cat agrees
did this slang come from NY thought it was a down south thing anyway the metaphore was just ok to me felt u could've displayed it more creatively with facts concept I see the nameplay idk just felt could've been more here.
Against Bomb’ard u got floored with plain punches, but I got something up my sleeve for this square
These fists the wright bros, cause they goin be the first known for putting a machine in the air
dope
The last guy ducked, using probation as an excuse, so ur a last minute fill-in…at any rate youngin’
Fact machine? Nah, Dog’s a bounty hunter…only reason youre even here is cause an Inmate’s Running
didn't like the wording on the finish here
Grimm disembowels chumps, have u eating through tubes and straws from the trigger hand
Im no psychic… but when this bout is through, u and solid food goin’ cancel all future dinner plans
nice
That format you use just shows your simple minded, but it explains your process ‘o thought management
U chose that style in a pathetic attempt to lash out at those who never called u multi talented….
ok
V/Grimm had actual text formatted punches just overall easy win for him hes more experienced had a few creative hits
grimm wins